The Lonely Fountain

Lost in my thoughts...

The Lonely Fountain            by Sami Khalil

Sitting on a wooden bench,

absent-minded, sulking at life,

images rose without a will;

heavy-eyelid phoenixes upsurged through amnesia.

 

I spied a lonely fountain, coiffed three-tiered elevator,

bathing in her statuesque beauty, accosting a plethora of

sparkling repartees; wild-haired waters, dropping recycled

dreams, voguish in their times.

 

Smidgen of senses came back to me, shadowing

my quintessence in an orchestration of awakenings,

fronting the dual ties, acting with temerity.

Feeling like a surplussed homeless,

I tossed few coins as she asked me to dance.

 

Reviews

[John]

The journey from sulking at life to tossing a few coins, nudged as it were in a slightly more positive direction, is so effective for being understated. What has brought about this change? A visionary appreciation described by the effect of 'sparkling repartee' and 'wild haired water', the fountain as a human created muse.

[Sami Khalil]

So true and well said John as you accurately state. How we can change our thoughts from negative to positive by merely changing patterns and gears in the process, with influence from the muse and other things. Humans have the power within to change. Hence, this poem. Thank you so much for the visit and kind exchange. See you in a jiffy.

[Pete]

so deeply reflective. love the wording as thoughts and feelings flow. the trevi has nothing on this. i was sitting there with you searching for loose change in my aging pockets.

Feeling like a surplussed homeless,
I tossed few coins as she asked me to dance.

i think we've all been there at one time or another. i always say that these are the defining moments that reveal who we really are. this is one dance i wouldn't mind learning. count my flipped coins in and my dancing shoes laced... :)

[Sami Khalil]

Howdy my friend! I love your take on this write. I can so relate to everything you say. WE think alike. Million thank yous for all. On my way.

[Aura]

This is a lovely piece. It creates such a peaceful image in my mind of a person just taking in a breath-taking water fountain and observing how the water flows.

[Sami Khalil]

Howdy do! I really do think so. I can't thank you enough for this wonderful review and kind words.

[Aura]

It was my pleasure reading!

[Sami Khalil]

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[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Such a breath-taking piece! Listening to the tinkling sound of water is a great way to relax and overcome the most stressful day!

[Sami Khalil]

Wowzy Woo! So true and well said dear poet and friend. Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts and liking. See you soon.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

My pleasure as always!

[Sami Khalil]

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[Lydia Shutter]

Such a lovely write. I think staring at the movement of water is one of the most calming things a person can do. I enjoyed the personification in this one....dancing with the fountain. Good one, Sami. Lydi**

[Sami Khalil]

It is indeed. Where can mind can take us???
I love your take on this poem and hope all is well.

[Sami Khalil]

Thank you so much Lydia...

[Katriya]

Beautifully expressed !From loneliness to contentment, while sitting near a fountain. Well composed!

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! Thank you so much Shafrini for this wonderful review and kind visit. All rich blessings.

[Einstein Noodle]

i love this Sami ... mwahvelous use of the language .. it sings as i read .. vivid personifications in the fountain ... i can see her dancing through the water .. even still ... so happy i stopped to read sir! she's a beauty ... no doubt!
E.

[Sami Khalil]

Javajinga! I love it. What a pleasure to see you visit my friend and share your thoughts. I got inspired sitting across a 3 tired fountain and got lost in my thoughts. Glad you liked it sir Einstein. See you in a jiffy.

[Einstein Noodle]

i can't imagine a better way to see it's beauty and form than to see woman within it! :)

[Sami Khalil]

HEHEHEHE.................

[2048tm]

I sympathize with your poetry. Today I had a dream, a fairly lengthy one, in which I was beaten by someone and the only people concerned about finding me were my parents. I instantly recalled everything they had done for me and everything I had done for them. I felt humiliated and awoken as if I had lost memories of the fiery and vibrant person I used to be. I was overcome with empathy and sobbed while penning these songs. Thank you very much.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! What a dream or a nightmare. Must have some interpretation like a foreign language. Thank you kindly for this wonderful review.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like the personification of the fountain...a she, and she could dance...
droplets dancing in tiers...
representing the tears of life this lonely person felt.

interestingly, the first thing I thought of when I saw the fountain, was one I encountered at a wedding...but it was not water in it, it was chocolate...
scrumptious chocolate....something to indulge...maybe quashing the loneliness even for those attending the wedding.
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Howdy! So true and well said dear Jacob. Sounds delicious and interesting. I guess is what circulates through that can make a difference. No blood through a fountain for that will be a horror movie. Lol
Thank you so much sir.

[KAREN]

Such a beautiful write! I often visit a fountain like that. And the soft flow of water pouring down does sound like music to sooth a soul and make them dance.

[Sami Khalil]

OMG! Same feelings here. I love it. It is as you say. Thank you so much Karen for all. See you soon.

[KAREN]

My pleasure!

[Sami Khalil]

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