A Drowning Fish

Oceans apart...

A drowning Fish           by Sami Khalil

I choke on words,

eating my heart out for you;

infected, twisted, segmented-

hands dialing soundless grief.

I feel the jet lags of dreams;

starry ceilings collapsing

in suicidal implosions.

I carry a ring finger

upon heart gaping,

milieu-hinged painful vows,

wedged like absent moons

between jaws.

I choke on words,

stabbing my reality.

Things don’t add up;

scripts don’t fit

a drowning big fish.

I must gulp the swill,

before the great chill;

a forged conclusion.

Y’ all bring roses, incense

for I can’t recognize myself,

with porcelain features.

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Robert Haigh]

A poem bursting with explosive imagery, like a firework display! Oceans apart - it is sad when that becomes a reality. I have been there myself! A powerful poem, Sami!

[Sami Khalil]

OMG! So true and well said dear poet and friend. It is amazing how we all share some universal experiences. Many rich blessings coming your way. Thank you so much.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

There is so much rich, pulsating thought within this piece! "I feel the jet lags of dreams; starry ceilings collapsing
in suicidal implosions". Whew, now that's writing!

[Sami Khalil]

Howdy do! You are so kind and inspiring. Glad you like it my friend. Thank you so much dear poet and friend. See you soon.

[duff]

There is some wicked imagery going on. Each line packing its own story.

"I choke on words,
stabbing my reality."

I keep going back to read this and you discover a different thought each time. I feel like this is a tongue lashing for the reader just to sit back and absorb. Great work. A most enjoyable read Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

Hehehe! You are so kind. They just come out and I leave it to the reader. Million thank yous dear Duff for all. On my way.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Wow! This is so deep with emotions! I believe a lot of us has them porcelain features! This was written with a poetic pen for sure!

[Sami Khalil]

Howdy Kathy! A warm welcome and a precious thank you for the visit and sharing. May lots of blessings come your way.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

My pleasure, Sami!

[Sami Khalil]

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[Ken Simm.]

I loved the surrealist title before I saw the real subject of the poem and then I loved the whole thing even more. Unfortunately it is somethin g I could once empathise with. Excellent writing.

[Sami Khalil]

wow! Thank you so much dear poet and friend for this wonderful review and kind sharing. I understand. All rich blessings.

[Miss Sharon]

(Y’ all bring roses, incense for I can’t recognize myself, with porcelain features.) What an awesome closure to this post! Great writing my friend. ~Sharon

[Sami Khalil]

Gracie Millee my friend. You are awesome too. Thank you so much for all. See you soon.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"jet lags of dreams" "can't recognize myself/ with porcelain features"

love those lines...and related to this poem a little too much...
now I might even recognize myself with my own porcelain features.
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Hehehe! You are great sir Jacob. Glad you can relate. I'm honored by your visit and sharing. See you shortly without some jet lags.

[Pete]

wow. that's some mighty big ocean. so poignant. it certainly can feel that way. uncomfortable and disturbing but real. love that word, "milieu". nice work ... :)

[Sami Khalil]

Howdy dowdy! Thank you so much dear poet and friend for this awesome review. All rich blessings in
beautiful Boston.

[M. J. Smith]

How many good women ruined by just such terrible circumstances?

[Sami Khalil]

You are so right. Many and many. Good questions to ponder. Their loss. Good men are few and far in between. They like the rebel kind, I guess.

[M. J. Smith]

When sacred vows become meaningless, what is left? Trapped like prey in a python's could, we feel the life being squeezed out of us. But what is left to live for when love has turned toxic?
These are the thoughts this poem brings to mind. A loveless marriage, a woman trapped. Very sad words.

[M. J. Smith]

Confound that autocorrect! It should read Trapped like prey in a python's coils!

[Sami Khalil]

Javajavinga! Your words are so true and so poetic. It is all as you say indeed M.J. It ruins lives. It causes some men to go crazy. Thank you so much dear poet for all.
Use that line in one of your poems. It is goooood.