Merry-Go-Round

A dream of reality...Do we ever lose that inner child??? An English sonnet

Merry-Go-Round        by Sami Khalil

A dream of reality                                                                                 

Roundabout merry the merry-go-round

Painted horses galloped breathless without

I sprawled under the carnival’s playground

With whoops and yells and paled faces in doubt.

 

Like a thunderclap, I watched the grizzled hairs

Breathing their sighs as high tempo ran through

They wondered how foolish those lad’s affairs

Born frail, riding steady bravery’s debut.

 

With aplomb, I kept waving at the crowd

Ships in the distance appeared indistinct

I groped for my spectacles while unbound

Across morose, slack smiles, placidly succinct.

 

Roundabout merry the merry-go-round

A recurring dream boomeranged my ground.

 

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I enjoyed reading your sonnet. I wrote a piece with the same title years ago but I dug it out just now and reposted it if you'd care to give it a look. The pieces have nothing in common but the subject matter but it's interesting how we each took our initial impressions in different directions. I don't write in form intentionally so there'll be no sonnets from me but I still enjoyed reading yours. Great stuff! F.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! Thank you so much Fabian for this wonderful review and kind sharing. I have to check it out. Glad you like this sonnet.

[Lathen Griffiths]

Brought back the excitement of my youth when the fair came to town. Very vivid imagery

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! Thank you so much Lathen for sharing about your youthful experience and for this lovey visit. Glad to meet you.

[Coyote Poetry]

A wonderful poem Sami.
"Like a thunderclap, I watched the grizzled hairs
Breathing their sighs as high tempo ran through
They wondered how foolish those lad’s affairs
Born frail, riding steady bravery’s debut."
I loved the above lines. My grandchildren love the Merry-Go-Round. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Sami Khalil]

Bajinga! Thank you o much dear poet and friend for this marvelous review and response. Our inner child is a wonderful thing. Our lost youth is a tragedy. Be blessed.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

:)....................

[Vertigo Cat1111]

A amazing, brilliant piece! I love the way this was written and each word used added on and on to the poem while fitting in. The imagery and rhyming and everything you do with this piece is just perfect and evokes a feeling of nostalgia while being bright and whimsical. Thank you for sharing!

[Sami Khalil]

Whooooeee! My utmost thanks go to you dear poet for your visit and great sharing. Honored by it all. See you soon.

[Allen Smuckler]

Way to go Sami... A terrific Elizabethan Sonnet. Your imagery was vivid and your rhyming ... perfect. Especially debut-through and the near rhyme: crowd-unbound. One minor critique, "woop"...should be "whoop", unless "woop" is the old english way of spelling it. Great job, though. I enjoyed it immensely.

[Sami Khalil]

Holy Macaroni! Thank you so much dear poet and friend for this wonderful review. It was a typo indeed. Glad you pointed that out. I fixed. Have a great weekend. Waiting for your new works...

[Re-Pete]

i think we all have a childhood memory of it - to this day, i can't walk past one without smiling and reveling at the sight of parents with their little ones. the expressions on little faces are priceless.

Born frail, riding steady bravery’s debut.
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Across morose, slack smiles, placidly succinct.

well done sami. as long as we hold onto a bit of the inner child within we are all the better. thanks for the ride today (up, down and around) ah the innocent music and bright, happy colors ... :)

[Sami Khalil]

Whoeee! So true and well said sir Pete. I love your take on this sonnet. Million thank yous for all. I hope you still keep that alive too. See you soon.

[Einstein Noodle]

hmmm the grizzled hairs grabs my attention sir ... as do the ships and morose smiles .. this really intrigues me sir! the Merry-Go- round a place to test the young knights and lady fairs .. how could such a slow repetitive ride be so thrilling and daring .. and ohhhhhhhhhh to grab that gold ring!!! your poem has turned my heart first back to being 6 yrs old or so and at the same time .. an old man thinking back through pained pages in life's review ... some disappointments .. so loss of that inner child .. super work with contrasts says i ... deeply emotive in the closing .. thanks for sharing sir!
E.

[Sami Khalil]

OMG! You are so right and on the message dear poet and friend. This poem, just to add more to your great interpretation about the inner child, is that life can be circuitous (Even history also) and linear at the same time. With our frailty, we muster courage to ride its events. We try this and that. We can have fun along the way or miss the fun. We can take life seriously or make it a game. That inner child spirit(as you marvelously point out) is always with us. We long and reminisce about the past and the lost youth.
The ships in the distance represent our passing chance or even missing them on the waves of opportunities to see new worlds.
Thank you so much sir Einstein(The Catholic one) for all. Be blessed.

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha ..yes all true and fine wisdom you share .. circuitous and linear .. a fine conundrum to meditate and blow ones head into a state of "no mind" :)))))))))))))))))))))) ah . what a wonderful world and life it is my friend!

[Sami Khalil]

Yes siiiirrrr. We are blessed indeed. Blessing to have you on this site , too.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you sir!

[andrew mitchell]

Great work Sami, great work.

[Sami Khalil]

Javajavinga! Thank you so much Emperor Andrew for this wonderful review and summation. It means a lot.

[andrew mitchell]

You conquered an English sonnet.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! Thank you Emperor Andrew. You are appreciated.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

This kind of writing never fails to inspire... what an excellent hand you laid upon this.

[Sami Khalil]

OMG! Travis: You are a great writer and soul. You are so inspirational in your own flavor of expressions. I'm thrilled to know you love this form of poetry and thankful for the visit and review.
Keep the blessings going around.