Snow White

Snow White                   by Sami S. Khalil

A frozen dream

Held in vivid cerise, Snow White’s asleep

Fashioned beauty in rosy slumber’s deep

Bedaubed face no awry eyes squinting

Tangling up my sanity, gently gripping.

 

Fires spit and flare up aside warm drifts

Winded runners shaken to cores’ gifts

Dazzling Christmas ornaments with embers

As moonlights dance around starry splendors.

 

Edges charred like ashen hearts burn slowly

And snow draping barren branches wholly

I lingered in her golden strands muffled

Wrapped in gloved silence hazily baffled.

 

Ensorcelled with, uttering magical spells

Awakened fleeting notions of wedding bells.     

 

Reviews

[ms. barrie]

exquisitely wrought, i'm in awe of every word you use and how you used them...
my favorite, the third stanza. always a treat for the senses to read your ink, Sami.

thank you for sharing your incredible art :)

[Sami Khalil]

Whoaaa!. What a wonderful treat to see you visit hoping you are doing well in these mad times we had and the uncertainties we face. I tried to leave reviews upon your great works but I could not. I understand though. Thank you so much.
By the way, I came up with my unique format of a sonnet with the rules I express above in the caption. God bless.

[ms. barrie]

you're so very welcomed Sami :)
unfortunately,my family & i have yes, tasted the tragedy of these times indeed.
thank you for taking me away with your gifted pen
i hope all has been serene in your realm...and everyone is staying safe!

i will have to read those...very soon,
as this site's ads, etc keep freezing me...
as usual lol

brightest blessings to you and yours, :))))

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! Sorry to hear that about your family. We are fine managing life day by day
You take care and keep your creativity alive.

[ms. barrie]

you too, i will be back very soon, i am v. behind on everyone's writes. i enabled reviews...
may your quill keep blazing away :))

[ms. barrie]

p.s. your thoughtful words, and support are wholeheartedly appreciated, Sami. :))))

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure. Any time...

[Sami Khalil]

You amaze in many ways even in a maze.

[ms. barrie]

aw, thank you, Dear Poet, as do you! :))

[Sami Khalil]

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[Poetic Beauty]

A new tale of Snow White. The last stanza really caught my attention. Well done

[Sami Khalil]

Hi there! Thank you so much for this review.

[Silmara McGarry]

Hey Sami :-)
To start with, I love the title!!
So comprehensive with your writing style and beautifully laid, one stanza more wonderful than the other!
and though I love the entire poem, I love the end of it most of all!

GREAT!
:-)))

[Sami Khalil]

Whoa! I'm pleased to hear that Silmara. Million thank yous for your visit and appreciation. You are appreciated.

[Silmara McGarry]

You are most welcome!!!

[Sami Khalil]

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[MCS]

a lovely read on this cold morning. what a gift you have my friend.

[Sami Khalil]

Whoeee! A gift to have friends like yourself even on cold mornings. You are appreciated.

[MCS]

i always enjoy my visits here :)

[Sami Khalil]

Same here. Gracie millee....

[TeeMarie91]

Lovely job!!! I thought this was great!

[Sami Khalil]

Hi there! Thank you so much for the visit and comment.

[TeeMarie91]

thank you i hope we can become friends you are a very talented writer!!

[Sami Khalil]

We will. You are too. Thank you for the vote of confidence. I will support you. Take care.

[TL Boehm]

A lovely retelling of the tale, Sami

[Sami Khalil]

Hi TL Boehm. I'm thrilled to have come across a variation of the English sonnet in my own way. Hoping to write some more in the future. I call it Sami's sonnet. Thank you so much.

[NotUsinganymore]

Very interesting poem. I liked this story about it. Though I was never told the orginal version of Snow White as a child growing up.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! Thank you so much JungLee for this lovely review and visit. Glad you liked the poem.

[NotUsinganymore]

You are welcome

[Sami Khalil]

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[barleygirl]

This poem is pretty close to being a sonnet, in form. I avoid sonnets like the plague, so I won't try to instruct you, altho many at the cafe could. There's pretty close to 10 syllables per line, except I think most sonnets use an alternating rhyme abab cdcd, etc. It would be fun to work with this poem further to see if you could pull off a sonnet! Now about the meaning. We don't get snow here in California, of course, but this year, we evidently aren't getting any rain either. Only 1.5 inches since last spring! So, if you thought of rainfall as Snow White, you could say she's sound asleep. And while she's sleeping, we're going crazy craving rain, our wells going dry, the threat to wildfires growing year by year, etc. So, your poem conveys a bit of crazed action, which is how I feel, trying not to imagine how bad it could be if we don't get any more rain than this, trying to love our lovely balmy winters, no toweling down wet dogs, etc. No matter how I dance around the tree, I can't stop thinking about how Snow White (aka Rain Bright) is not waking up!!!! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Sami Khalil]

Hi Margie. I thank you for the time and effort(if little to study my two latest Sami's sonnets).This is my form of sonnet that I improved on the English sonnet. I found out (my opinion only as I told Emma Joy) that the English sonnet breaks the flow and musicality when read aloud by skipping the rhyme every other line. So I decided to keep the form(which is so easy to do for I'm up to any challenge) and make my rhymes every 2 consecutive lines. I wrote beneath my poem the explanation which I hope people will take time and read instead of hurrying up and losing the whole aspect of it.
Thank you so much again(this is not directed to you but to others).
They can count the iambs and so forth.
Happy New Year.

[Re-Pete]

certainly no witch with a poison apple here. you must be the handsome prince. such fine crafting of words and depth of imagery. invokes a deep sleep with sweet possibilities as it takes one's breath away.

Wrapped in gloved silence hazily baffled.

... :)

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! An honor indeed coming from you sir Pete. You are highly talented and inspirational. We all pushing ahead with this marvelous art form. Much appreciated sir.

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved how you used the language Sami.
"Fires spit and flare up aside warm drifts
Winded runners shaken to cores’ gifts
Dazzling Christmas ornaments with embers
As moonlights dance around starry splendors."
The above lines. So good. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Sami Khalil]

Whoaaa! Thank you so much Coyote Poetry for this awesome review and lovely visit. You are truly an h0norable man. Happy Holidays.

[Coyote Poetry]

Merry Christmas Sami and I love your work.

[Sami Khalil]

Same here. Gracie millee....