You saw me born

Romance

You saw me born          by Sami Khalil

I had you in mind, the backdrop of the night,

to pen my chronicles, with great effect, unexpurgated.

Impromptu thoughts made landfalls,

dancing in red and grey,

in imperceptible glints, till the morning.

I was unscathed, innumerable times,

forever undone, fading in and out.

I had you in mind, when words toiled,

our winged friends, flitting about under coral skies, touching the sun softly.

A cold front was announced, a tardy burst.

Resolutely we stood together, jolly in silly ways,

in sweet ardor, with gleeful smiles, above all adored.

Love was our fest host, a requisite partner,

begrudged without measure.

We wept with aberration, with heavy tongues

confessed, guarded by a posse in lawless lands.

I had you in mind, the backdrop of the night,

sleepless, for sleepers relinquish the nights.

I had you in bona fide quietude, in love.

You saw me born!  

Reviews

[Pete]

deep, interesting analogy. when romance blooms something wonderful is born as are we. the sun is brighter, the sky bluer. nothing can stop it - cuts through, clarifies and transcends, even storms (weathering and staying the course). mere thoughts of our loves conjure up innumerable, unstoppable feelings in that place of quietude ... :)

We wept with aberration, with heavy tongues

confessed, guarded by a posse in lawless lands.

[Sami Khalil]

Whoa! Your words are a poem by itself and wonderful. I love your take on this write. Be blessed as always. Thank you so much Pete.

[Alfred Kukitz]

evening wakes to drunken grandeur ink flows in tidal wave perceptions......you are born!

Regards,
Al

[Sami Khalil]

OMG! Your words are so beautiful and poetic. Proud to call you friend. Be blessed...

[barleygirl]

It seems I've not seen "romance" from you, nor have I seen too many poems. Now I've read two romance poems from you & they are like night & day! This one is more in the soft romantic tones one might expect. I love the core concept that love can cause us to be born, so that when two people fall in love, this is like being there when someone is born. I love the complexity of all that implies (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Sami Khalil]

Whoa! You ain't seen nothing yet...Lol. Joking aside, I'm so glad to see you visit and share. As you know, it depends on my latest moods and so forth. Have a wonderful weekend.

[.]

My first impression was that, yes, this did read like a song, Sami. I think it was the repetition that put that thought in my head. Whatever the form it works wonderfully on the page.

Your writes have always been full of exceptional vocabulary and this one is no different. The imagery and romantic tone just carries the words to new heights. Love can certainly make us feel reborn and you have conveyed that point very well throughout. A fine romantic piece of work.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! Thank you fine friend and writer for this lovely and mesmerizing review. Pleasure and joy when you visit.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Sami... to see and feel someone born when love ascends
from somewhere in the rising of the sun... a feeling
that you have entwined with a smile and soul that
knows no end. Your poetry is penned on ancient parchment
that knows a heart by standing apart. truly, Pat

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! I love how you pen your thoughts in poetic stream of thought. Million thank yous and Happy Thanksgiving to all...

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Sami.. may your Cornucopia be full of festive fruits and vegetables. The Cornucopia dates all the way back to 5 B.C. truly, Pat (I read it on Google)

[Sami Khalil]

Thank you kindly.

[emmajoy]

'I had you in mind, the backdrop of the night, ' sleepless, for sleepers relinquish the nights.'

You've always had a way of entering the mind by a back door! The way you've expressed what I think is the birth of a poem .. is a suddenly waking dream, Sami. From first word to last, you've gently filled the mind with your own 'bona fide quietude'. Both an academic and emotional poem, cleverly
executed. Gently, of course.

[Sami Khalil]

Whoa! I might be playing tricks on you. Just kidding. I do get those feelings and I pen them as inspired. Something triggers another. I'm so glad you like my gentle poems. Happy holidays.

[emmajoy]

Thank you... take care of those triggers!:)

[Sami Khalil]

I will. You as well.

[ms. barrie]

this is truly a romanticism masterpiece, if i ever read one,
simply spellbinding in its fluidity dear poet!
your incredible use of language and word-weaving
is awe inspiring to read...i adore every word you used
and how you used them. your quill spills stardust
your poetic garden is such a delightfully inspiring
place to always wander.

many thanks, Sami for sharing your poetic artistry ~ :))))

[Sami Khalil]

Whoa! I truly adore you and your poetic creativity as well. I always knew you have the taste and talent. So glad you could stroll in my poetic garden. Happy Autumn...

[ms. barrie]

you’re so very welcomed and very much deserved, dear poet! all my gratitude for your limitless support (still showing an interest on my ramblings) and sincere kindness. i feel so honored by gracious sentiments from a gifted wordsmith such as yourself.

i’ll re visit your art again very soon.

brightest blessings to you and yours ~ ✨:)))

[ms. barrie]

happiest of autumns to you as well.
wishing you a happy thanksgiving 🍁 ~ :)))

[Sami Khalil]

:::::::))))))))))

[ms. barrie]

:))))) x3,7200

[Sami Khalil]

Lol........

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of words my friend. The words danced to perfection.
"Impromptu thoughts made landfalls,
dancing in red and grey,
in imperceptible glints, till the morning."
I loved the above lines. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Sami Khalil]

You are amazing too Coyote. Forgive me of I haven't visited much for life is busy as you know. Million thanks yous sir for all you say and do. Happy upcoming Thanksgiving.

[Coyote Poetry]

Always good to read your work and you are welcome my friend.

[Sami Khalil]

:::::)))))))))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

romance, yes....also could be a creative thought born...the muse is our better half and she not only sees it, she helps birth it...
we feel "begrudged without measure"---
the relationship is always just a bit crazy isn't it? she comes and goes...but always there in the delivery room when a poem is born.
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Whoa! So true and well said sir Jacob. I love how you put things in great perspectives. My utmost gratitude sir.

[Sami Khalil]

I don't know if it sounds like a song. Any way, enjoy the romance...