The guardians of the deep...Folklore, fiction and a enviromental message...
Merfolk By
Sami Khalil
Of days that
lingered, athwart time and course, Merfolk skulked the gaunt ruins of
lighthouses and harbors.
Guardians of the
deep, in trust from The Great Spirit, they ferreted around on small amphibian
legs, devouring mariners, leaving those fainthearted seadogs bone-scattered
after the smite and the bedropled curses of lisping tongues.
Their gay fleets
had turned to driftwood across the rippled afterimage, in no beguilement of
vesper stars. Seagulls would break the silence of the cliffs beneath the
earthen horizon as the refulgent eyes of the sun rippled golden.
The rebuff of
mermen and mermaids arrived soon, after those ungracious mortals dumped their
fetid waste into holy waters, bringing this blind fury anears swelling
hearts.Rebellion and unrest raged in
the brooding, once a placid deep, led by a fisherfolk, who with jest and song,
was lured magically by a sea maiden into matrimony, to ascend the throne of
kingship, vacated by her deceased father-king, striking her melody across
willow wooded harp in her arms by the sea.
Him, finding no
comely human counterpart smitten to marry him, had taken the plunge, blithely
never looking back towards the quaint fishing hamlets.
The merfolk gave
all their allegiance to him, leading them to fight gallantly their sworn
enemies. Mysteriously transfiguring into one of them by the wizard of the sea queen,
waves were jubilant with elysian visions of the future.
After every
sunset, armed with idolatrous passions, they purified the shores with unstinted
loyalty. The sea became fretting for a long time, devoid not of hauntings.
In his speech, the
new king told his subjects, warning all mortals: “Never awaken a slumber or the
slumbered, for tides will turn homeward.” There was joyance once more to the
merfolk, for their virgin waves returned to limpid lives keenest to sincere
eyes.
Landward, some
ceased not to frown, piping murmurs. They were the heirs of the strife!
Seafarer tale of woes and sculdugery, mayhem and tales. Epic storytelling with great images to boot.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Wow! So true and well said dear poet. I'm so glad you enjoyed the meanings behind this story. I hope.. read moreWow! So true and well said dear poet. I'm so glad you enjoyed the meanings behind this story. I hope to see you doing well in all environs.
“striking her melody across Willow wooded harp”... (we live in a community named “Willow Pond” haunted by the Architect who went bankrupted and took his life. “They purified the shores with unstinted loyalty”.
Is what we do in our community. Fondly, Pat
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Wow! You should write a story about that with some added drama. I like that gist. Up to you. This is.. read moreWow! You should write a story about that with some added drama. I like that gist. Up to you. This is more an enviromental story about our water resources and such but also about protecting communities you might say from evil doers. Thank you so much great Patricia Wedel for all.
I love your imaginative use of "merfolk" & all the creative ideas associated with these sea beings. I love the way you write in an old-timey sea-faring style as if your poem is pulled from very different times. I love your word choices & how you have a ferocious command of vocabulary. But all in all, this storyline is a little hard for me to follow, becuz you put more attention into word crafting (which I love) . . . but not as much attention to the flow of the narrative, perhaps? (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Wow! Thank you so much barleygirl for this amazing review and kind visit. I like to keep the reader .. read moreWow! Thank you so much barleygirl for this amazing review and kind visit. I like to keep the reader hanging or hungry for more details or a sequel perhaps. A spoonful of this and that to keep them intrigued and wanting the main meal so to speak. All rich blessings.
6 Years Ago
I totally understand. For years people used to say my poems don't feel finished becuz I stop at an a.. read moreI totally understand. For years people used to say my poems don't feel finished becuz I stop at an abrupt spot.
6 Years Ago
I like suspense so don't listen to them. Gracie Mille
My blood must be salty for, I have no fear of depths and a great fear of shallow living.
Your talents have no limits my dear friend, I so enjoyed this.
Wow! Thank you so much beloved poet and friend for this wonderful review and visit. Good to see you... read moreWow! Thank you so much beloved poet and friend for this wonderful review and visit. Good to see you.
6 Years Ago
you're most welcomed, its always a pleasure to read your words
Aha wow what an imaginative mermaidian tale u have spun. I didn't know u could write so superbly from the imagination. Your word choice is extraordinary and impressive. You portray and picture the story in words and content in a way u bring menfolk as if to reality, u can really entertain readers from all corners of the globe with such tales. Kudos.
Plz do read my newest poem too.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Wow! So true and well articulated. I'm so glad you like my story telling endevours. My imagination i.. read moreWow! So true and well articulated. I'm so glad you like my story telling endevours. My imagination is being used indeed. Thank you so much.
' .. The rebuff of mermen and mermaids arrived soon, after those ungracious mortals dumped their fetid waste into holy waters, bringing this blind fury anears swelling hearts. Rebellion and unrest raged in the brooding, once a placid deep, .. '
For me the core of your post is based in and on the essential being, a saviour, for those desperately needing protection. '.. In his speech, the new king told his subjects, warning all mortals: “Never awaken a slumber or the slumbered, for tides will turn homeward.” and so, on to your final phrase.
Your words are powerfully put, language as ever rich with vocabulary and meaning. But there's more and more as eyes travel start to finish. What a fine post this is, Sami!
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Whoa! What a powerful review and understanding. You are very sharp indeed. You can unravel layers to.. read moreWhoa! What a powerful review and understanding. You are very sharp indeed. You can unravel layers to get to the truth of the matter. Million thank yous good friend.
An absolute pleasure, it's a very special theme and brilliantly worded. Whoa to you too, quick thin.. read moreAn absolute pleasure, it's a very special theme and brilliantly worded. Whoa to you too, quick thinking, Sami!
A social message and lesson hidden between the lines of a mystical magical poem. Indeed, they were heirs of the strife....and never realized what was ahead. You are quite the storyteller, Sami. Lydi**
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Wow! So true and well articulated. Thank you so much beloved poet and friend for this wonderful rev.. read moreWow! So true and well articulated. Thank you so much beloved poet and friend for this wonderful review and appreciation. You are appreciated.
Wow! Thank you so much Wordman for this lovely visit and amazing review. So glad you like the Folklo.. read moreWow! Thank you so much Wordman for this lovely visit and amazing review. So glad you like the Folklore with a message.
and let that be a lesson for one and all.... Ah' Sami.. you are indeed a masterful weaver of most wondrous words...... are you sure this is fiction........... Neville
Hahaha. Thank you so much good friend and great poet for this wonderful review and lovely visit. All.. read moreHahaha. Thank you so much good friend and great poet for this wonderful review and lovely visit. All appreciated...
6 Years Ago
My very sincere pleasure Sami and here's wishing you all Good Things, Neville