Perfect Solitude

Lyrics to a song to be sung...

              

            Perfect Solitude

                                 By Sami Khalil                          

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I want to invite you

Even if you're uncomfortable

To my perfect solitude.

I want you to relax

Take a deep breath

Mind you this imprisonment

We are being glued.

Would you happen to know

Or have you overlooked

The backgrounds we share

The velvet thoughts

The adverts fading away

Into the hypnotic mood.

Lady of grace

Of brighter mornings

Of mislabeled nights

I want to remake songs

Where everything is

Merely a cover

A muffled substitute.

I want to lead in love

Keeping it low key

Where every prelude 

Is a quiet rendition 

To these two hearts

In perfect gratitude.

I want to invite you

When you are comfortable

To my perfect solitude

To my perfect solitude... 

Reviews

[Wondering Mind]

I was once told that solitude is to be destitute of Love, or the one you love; I was much younger then and I didn't believe. Now, with all these years on my shoulders, I'm a believer..
Now to your profound poetry; the perfect solitude would only be not that, but perfection with the one that makes you whole.... Lovely, and apologies for going off in at tangent

[Bina]

*swoons* oh my this makes me giddy, such a wealth of emotion and I feel love in it so beautifully! You have a tender heart that you should express as often as you can. I truly love this

[Philip Muls]

Velvet words flowing gracefully. I could see these being the lyrics of a song by Lana Del Rei.

[Alfred Kukitz]

I'm coming, wait for me, I'm coming!

During this brief but overwhelming imprisonment I'll be sitting quietly on your breath, cajoling you with blossoms of silent's breath, hoping against hope this solitude never ends.

Regards,
Al

[B.J]

Imagery and creative flow are wonderful. I feel you are creating images beyond the mind in perfect flow. Wonderful write.

[Lyn Anderson]

For me, there are multiple layers to this piece. A new love, invited, to replace the old, perhaps? A nice, rhythmic piece.

[Karmee]

Wow, love your imagery, This a very well written write,
Very beautiful write.

[Beccy]

The language employed is exquisite, the tone so gentle, that the whole poem lulls and gives the reader time to reflect that though we need people, we need interaction, just as importantly, we need those moments of solitude to refresh and invigorate us.

Beccy.

[Daydreamer]

Supremeeeee... in terms of sentiment and word choice!! Truly enjoyed this read! Bravo😍😍😍😍😍😍😍


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[Tiana]

A definite hit! I would love to hear the lyrics put to music!

[gabrielle]

This piece is uniquely different from most of your verses. Good thing, i did not need to browse a dictionary :). I think this can be turned into a beautiful love song.