Perched

Perched to fly off into the unknown...A sad romance poem...

 

Perched/……………..BY Sami Khalil

Perched to fly off into the unknown…A romance poem.

The Poem:

 

The wind stops its whips

The rain halts its drips

The candle burns its tips

The ocean idles its ships

Death tightens its grips

Luck plays its many chips

The joker shares his quips

A lady shows off her hips

The traveler longs for trips

A trace is found on blips

My name perches sadly

on your lethargic lips!

 

Reviews

[Madalyn Beck]

This is something else entirely! I love how you weaved this delicate write. And the ending, oh the ending is what makes it sore. Spectacular write, my friend! :)

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Thankl you Madalyn for the lovely review...:)...........................

[Vidya Bacchus]

Oh this was great Sami.The world turns but still sometimes we find ourselves in the exact same place :)

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. I do like your take on this poem. You are amazing...:).................

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you Sami and you are most welcome :)

[Sami Khalil]

Grazie Mille...:)..........................

[Vidya Bacchus]

..........................:)

[Sami Khalil]

:)................................

[Ryze Poetix]

This was fun to read. Unique! Good job!

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Thank you Joyce for the visit. Appreciated...:)................

[Tom]

As if the world was slowly grinding to a halt !

The build up and then the somber conclusion were sublime !

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Thank you Tom for the wonderful visit. Take care friend...:)..........................

[Saddam]

Oh......... Little poor bird.
Awesome writing from the heart of a little bird.
Perspective eyes.
Love your writing and twit and chips.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Thank you beloved poet for all...Have a great one...:)................

[LadyAnn68]

Awesome! You have quite the imagination. Very fun reading and text! Where did you get the idea for this?

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. I was watching the birds in my yard perched on limbs and it sparked this. Thank you so much dear poet for all..Take care...:)........................

[LadyAnn68]

Very very cool!

[Sami Khalil]

:).................................

[Lyn Anderson]

Ahh, an unexpected, clever end. One thing, did you mean to say "ocean idles?" Anyway, great little snippet at the end.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Thank you so much dear poet for this lovely review. I think it is correct as is for Microsoft word gives red when you add an (s). Check it out for I tried. Thank you kindly for all...:)................

[Lyn Anderson]

Well, I would argue with Microsoft on that one, as you know, sometimes it is wrong, because the program is not recognizing the use of the ocean as a thing that idles -- but anyway, great write.

[Sami Khalil]

OK. I will change. I had it like that from the beginning...Take care...:)..............

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes I figured you did. Every once in a while, those silly programs don't get us -- I have to ignore its insistence I speak American instead of Canadian all the time:)

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:).........................

[Chris Micha]

Bravo my friend! Another brillant piece.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Thank you too brilliant poet and friend for this amazing review and vote of confidence...Have a great one...:)...................

[Lloyd Frieson-Small]

I found this to be very humorous, sami. This is greeting card material for certain. I also like the art you post with certain pieces. Great comical read. It seems you have the potential to touch every genre in succession.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. I try different genres to keep it creative and fresh. I get tired of the same old thing so to speak. So glad you like the uniqueness of this write although a little sad at the end...Have a great one...:)..................

[Dhaye]

Yes, romantic but sad.... Someone said to me that being martyr in a literary piece sounds romantic, but in real life, it's masochism. LOL
You cannot get all what you want....even love. That's life.
But you made this one perfect for the concept. Kudos!

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. So true and well spoken. I like that to be a martyr for love. Lol...Thank you so much for the visit and sharing...:)...................

[Dhaye]

Haha! You're romantic then...in pen....but a masochist for real. Welcome to the club! LOL
You're welcome.

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha...:).....................