Perched

Perched to fly off into the unknown...A sad romance poem...

 

Perched/……………..BY Sami Khalil

Perched to fly off into the unknown…A romance poem.

The Poem:

 

The wind stops its whips

The rain halts its drips

The candle burns its tips

The ocean idles its ships

Death tightens its grips

Luck plays its many chips

The joker shares his quips

A lady shows off her hips

The traveler longs for trips

A trace is found on blips

My name perches sadly

on your lethargic lips!

 

Reviews

[Jamil Isimbabi]

God this is art. So short, so meaningful, every line. Ill learn to write like this one day hopefully

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. So thankful for the support and encouraging words. I wish you all the best...:)....................

[Corset]

oh now come on who could say Sami without a smile? but I must admit, there are some days when everything seems so huge, and others when it is weightless, I guess one takes the good days with the bad, but it is spring! I smell it in the air!

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha. So true and wondefully said. I look forward to spring and reading your spring days writes...All appreciated...:).......................

[Corset]

my treat as always.

[Sami Khalil]

:)........................

[tressa]

I think this poem is wonderful and carefree in its style but really shows how we can be so carefree until realization hits, just like your poem does. interesting...

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Thank you so much Tressa for stopping by and sharing...Appreciated...:).................

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Sami... I adore the colorful art
of winged hope. Your poem offers many
sips of life's pleasures and measures of
nature at her bidding. Your talent is
truly tantalizing. As ever... Pat

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Thank you kindly Patricia for the tantalizing review. All appreciated...Be blessed...:)............

[Diana]

The continuous use of end rhyme really unifies this piece. Its simplicity is its strength. :)

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Thank you Diana for the lovely review. So glad to see you again...:)................

[Diana]

Of course. Can't stay away for too long with work like yours to read...

[Sami Khalil]

Thank you kindly for the encouragement...:).............

[Rita L. Sev]

A different form from you, Sami, done expertly well.

[Sami Khalil]

Thank you so much Rita for the lovely visit and time...Appreciated...:).................

[K.N. Lorenzen]

A good poem Sami :) I certainly appreciated its form, and the deviates from our anticipation, giving it a bitter-sweet after-taste and a linger of thought.

Fine work :)

K.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. You have nailed it on the head brilliant poet. Thank you poet for all...:).......................

[K.N. Lorenzen]

You are most welcome, Sami :)

[Sami Khalil]

:)..........................

[Victoria Kaer]

Short and sweet to get your point across. Nice. I like this.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Thank you Victoria for the sweet review. Have a great one...:).........................

[Victoria Kaer]

You're very welcome :)

[Sami Khalil]

:)............................

[Deon Visser]

I really loved this poem; alliteration is kinda my soft spot like this poem now, I just like the way it clearly and succinctly communicates.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Thank you Deon for the lovely review and your feedback. Good to know that...Be blessed...:)....................

[Kai Rollins]

Maybe I'm soft but that was rather sweet. (As I still try to sound like that did not affect me ha) tender and lighter than light. I enjoyed

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Thank you Kai for your soft review. Gl;ad it touched you...:).................