A Petticoat Diary

A Petticoat  ( female ) Diary/..........By Sami Khalil

(She lived in hope , died in despair)

Her desire to be loved and to love for there were no suitors for marriage.

Based on a true story when I was growing up

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On those days...

She dances like wild flowers

fluted by dulcet tones

gazing in sweet sorrow

upon utter solaces.

She, who passed star-lights

became a shadow of under-toned shimmers

wandering through life's wild affections

where heavy sighs became her measured void

looking for bucolic warm glows silhouetted 

in sweet sensations.

On those nights...

She cradles dreams in tender desires

in a veil of bashful smiles

where the indelible ink is saved 

for someone special...for keeps.

Still, she deserves a golden ring

and a clandestine house with stepping

stones to paradise of petaled gardens

where love is tickled to death for eternity.

On those months...

She survives in timeless beauty

brush-stroking the outlines of

her erasable heart, looking for 

hands to recreate her rapture d joy

living on just because; of fantasies 

on rainy afternoons with no parasols

losing herself in the chill of winters.

On those years...

Constellations glow brightly

and dim softly in sashays of dusted

apparitions when she dances her

last dance!

On those diaries...

Reviews

[rhythm&blues]

A lovely read although bittersweet, not many write in diaries anymore yet they are timeless.

[Rogue]

"On those nights...
She cradles dreams in tender desires
in a veil of bashful smiles
where the indelible ink is saved
for someone special...for keeps."

These lines really stood out for me. Beautifully scripted, my friend.
The whole piece is very descriptive and easily visualized.
The wrong lifetime, I fear. It seems she knew of him, but he was not in this one with her. Did he find her in the next? I wonder..

Exceptional writing on this one, Sami. :)

[Blue Lotus]

This piece is worth its weight in gold....
....it is like watching a film of words
..so vivid is the character and her emotions on display...
very well written khalil .... :-)

[Shweta Singh]

You could delve deep in her psyche & capture her flight,her frustration so very aptly...just like a true poet who can live anything & everything...the last part had the knock down effect!thanks for sharing Sami :-)

[Holly Mason]

what beautiful imagery...I adore all of the sentiments HIDDEN in your words
so many emotions in a ladies life ...and they are expressed in a diary
Hi I am Holly here is my diary
Hi I am Barbara here is my diary
what a world it would be if this is how we would meet-with all open and honest thoughts but these thoughts are so scary to share...especially the ones that say ..love has never found me
but she is still waiting and hoping
truly a lovely write
thank you for sharing fine sir

[Angi]

Time slips by and still she hopes and dreams and pours her heart into her diary. How sad to never know true love, Sami! It is a treasure to have it. Angi~

[Vikrantsingh]

Wow, Stunning and really wonderful.. Most catchy is On Those Days
Really constructive and very appealing write mate
All seasons from those days to months to years are wonderfully narrated and expressed :)

Cheers!
Singh :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, love she could never quite capture, although she came close many times...

she kept trying until she was gone...there is such longing, sadness, hope, persistence in this...

and the wording is exquisite...we cheer for her, we cry for her, we hope for her...we read her diary and feel guilty for the invasion...but the sadness for her overrides that...we long for her to find that happiness that is so elusive.

jacob

[Cassie]

Touching and excellently written. Loved reading. Now shelved in my library

[Rita L. Sev]

Sami, I like the progression of this piece, taking the reader through the days, nights, months, years...

She cradles dreams in tender desires
in a veil of bashful smiles
where the indelible ink is saved
for someone special...for keeps

Saving the indelible ink for someone special... who may never come along, so dark stains her heart forever...

This is my favorite of your poems so far - excellent!