You said.

Title??? ehhh.... idk

You told me I was perfect for you,

So I became yours.

 

You said I was too close,

So I backed off.

 

You told me I was too distant,

So I came closer.

 

You told me I was too open

So I closed up.

 

You said we never talked,

So I told you my every thought.

 

You said I was too mean,

So I pushed all my thoughts to the pit of my stomach.

 

You said I looked tired,

So I put on more masks to hide the pressure of my hidden emotions even more.

 

You said my stomach looked bloated,

So I stopped eating to lose the extra weight.

 

You said I wasn’t the person I used to be,

So I smiled a fake smile to fool you.

 

You asked for sex one day,

So I came over after that afternoon;

 

But when you saw what was under my jeans,

I cried.

 

You told me I was crazy,

So I tried to prove to you I wasn’t.

 

and you told me I was psychotic,

So I ran.

 

Then, you told me to keep running,

So I kept,

 

and when you told me to end it all,

That is exactly what I did.

 

S.L.S.

Reviews

[Night]

I don't know exactly what you were trying to express, but I felt a strange sadness reading it. The way the girl seemed like a mere puppet was a bit disheartening. Argh! This is wonderful in a terrible way! Now I sort of want to cry...

Great Write, though!

[Dark Tower]

A very emotional piece, very well written heart tugger.
Nice work.

[Laura Harrison]

this is a perfect poem :)

[Coyote Poetry]

It is a good title. The purpose of the poem was expressed. I like the way you led the reader in the flow of thoughts and action in the poem. We must be careful how we treat other people. They can be lost forever. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote