Prologue

Prologue

A long time ago, on the Planet Earth, there lived a man. Now, of course the question you are wondering is, “What exactly is a man?” Well, technically, a “man” is an alien of sorts, but these creatures can also be referred to as many things: a sinner, a deceiver, a careless oaf...yes, the race of man could easily be described for many hours. This man was no different, and his name was Owen I. Hurst.

Owen, a brown haired miscreant, began the origin of his relation to the Proth people one late, summer night when he was scuba diving far down on the ocean floor.

He was down very deep when he saw it.

Glowing in the void of darkness was a spherical object about the size of a baseball (a sport widely known on Planet Earth). Owen swam down towards the object to get a closer look. He went right up to it, curious. He peered down deep into it, transfixed by its crystal haze. He picked it up, mesmerized by its beauty. But something happened down there when Owen picked up that crystal ball...something that really never should have happened. For this was no ordinary crystal ball in the deepest part of the ocean on the Planet Earth. No, not at all.

This was the Planet Proth.

Reviews

[PaperBouquet]

Hi Zane! I caught a few grammatical/spelling errors. I believe "brown haired" is "brown-haired"; "towards" should be "toward"; and I think "the" before "Planet Earth" feels bulky.

The second paragraph could be expanded. Is Owen scuba diving for his job, relaxation, etc?

Overall, it is mysterious and engaging. Looking forward to more!

[Stars and Whales]

I have posted Chapter 1, actually, if you would like to take a look! Thanks a lot!

[Arrow&Heartland]

i liked it keep up the good work! Sincerely, Arrow&Heartland

[Thoren]

You have your audience captivated. The writing style reminds me of Douglas Adams but less silly. And there is nothing wrong with that. Interesting read.

[Craig2591]

Nice twist at the end. It was unexpected. Seems well written.

[Dave K]

This is intriguing. It definitely peeks my interest and makes me want to read the rest of the story, and that is what a prologue should do.

[Cam]

I like the view you are giving the reader. Personally, it makes me feel like planet earth is something I am studying and researching and our dear friend Owen was one of the scripted stories from this mysterious planet. I can't wait to read the rest.

[Stars and Whales]

I have posted Chapters 1 and 2 so far...Thanks!! I appreciate your feedback. Feel free to let me know if you want anything reviewed by me, and you can read what I've posted so far for my book. Thanks again.

[Cam]

No problem

[Eternal Devotion]

This beginning intrigues me, it makes me want to read on and find out what powers the crystal ball was hiding. A nice short but enlightening prologue, keeping the reader interested. Very well done. Will read more as soon as able (:

[Cody]

Very inventive. Keep up the good work on the series.

[Rainslover]

Hooking! Looking forward to the first chapter! Like PaperBouqet has said 'the' before 'Planet Earth' feels bulky, you could exclude it and the grammatical errors. Other than it is the right kind of mystery!

[Stars and Whales]

Thank you! I've posted Chapter 1 and 2 if you want to check them out!

[Iris]

I liked the last two lines: No, not at all. This was the Planet Proth. It's apparent you know where you're going with this. However, your prologue, I believe, is a bit short and not very descriptive. The reader might not understand this Owen character and why he's suddenly scuba diving. You see, you describe our world as "Planet Earth", so we don't know what Earth is like in your mind. If it is just like ours then you should probably say so. Also, this sentence: "Now, of course the question you are wondering is..." might need a bit of fixing. 'The question you have in your mind', or, 'what you are wondering is' would suit better.
Overall, it's a great start and I look forward to reading more.

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

^^ Sounds like you have a very interesting story idea! You were very descriptive with your prologue, looking forward to reading more!

Good Job

[Stars and Whales]

Thank you.

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

^^ You're welcome!

[Amy R]

i absolutely loved this, the way u describe everything including the events are real good!
looking forward to more of this book! seems quite interesting...
thanks for sharing.