Oh, my son! never give up.....

This poem is based on a boy who loses his first running race. So he thinks to give up but, his father encouraged him to never give up.

Oh, my son! Never give up 

Oh, my son! Never give up 

don’t lose your hope

there are so many people 

in a race to win that golden cup 

I know it’s not easy to gain 

don’t take back your step

you have to run a lot

you have to go into a pain

You have to compete with others

it’s a part of this game 

Show your strength to them

don’t care all they are strangers

They try to lose your confidence

 and they did that anything

to gives you defeat

but, don’t lose your self-confidence 

So many problems coming in your way

but, you have to run

as possible as you can

that time, problems also stay away 

Don’t care about anything

don’t think you are not able

I know you my son

you can do it everything

Time has comes now 

to show them what you are?

Perform like a champion 

remember this, it’s only your single show

Forget everything 

your pain, your sorrow

that thing felt you bad

you can do it, remember only this thing

Race began again with a golden cup

everyone did their best

to win that race

everyone won this mighty cup

Son wants his father feels proud of him

he has to win anyhow this time 

tears will come in his little eyes

to remember the struggle of his father on  him

Race was so tough 

not so easy

to win that a golden cup

but, this time, the son was ready enough

Until the end of the race

son used his all energy

and he wins and after from all that

he saw that the victory face

Sons make a new story

with the end of the race and

win that victory cup

this was just a starting off his glory

Now, his father feels proud

tears come into eyes of him

to see the happiness on their son’s eyes

they lose their mind into that victory sound

Author's Note

Moral- "never give up your dreams."

Reviews

[Jade]

AWESOME!!!
So well written and true. Really enjoyed this write.
It's quite inspiring.

[Akki]

Thanks Brandie!

[A.marie.speaks]

Beautiful message described here. Nothing feels better than achieving accomplishments.. except maybe, the joy of seeing your son succeed. I love that line " they lose their mind into that victory sound. "

[Akki]

Yes, I really agree that nothing feels better than achieving accomplishments. Your words gives me happiness. Thank you for reading and giving your lovely comment.

[A.marie.speaks]

You're very welcome!

[Riddhi]

I really liked this poem and your main idea...Keep it up and thanks for sharing...

[Akki]

Thank you so much Ridi!

[zunie frost]

I love you idea . this poem gives a great massage to a reader !! .this is a real natural and outstanding poem !!! Thankyou so much for sharing such an outstanding poetry . this shows your love towards your child !!!! 10000000 points

[Akki]

First of all Zunie, I don't have a son because I just a student & I am just 20 years old.
But, thanks for your lovely review...
Thank for points too..
: )

[zunie frost]

Oh I didn't know that !!! Put your poetry have a really natural feeling that touches the readers heart. And only one with a personal experience can write such deepoem . well then I must say that your creatively is really incredible

[Akki]

Thank you Zunie, I know I am so creative in nature but not as much as you!
because, you are more creative than me.
your poem was very creative than mine that I read.
Thank you so much for your such lovely words.

;)))))))))))))

[zunie frost]

hahaha !!! thanks a lot !! and welcome my friend

[Akki]

: ) keep smiling

[siddhi]

i truly respect what you have said i cent percent support it
thankyou for this




your frnd
siddhi

[Akki]

I know that Sidhi!
thanks for reviewing!

Your Friend,
Akki.

[siddhi]

i have send you some read requests please read them

your frnd
siddhi

[Akki]

Ok Siddhi, I will read... give me just few min.

Your friend,
Akki.

[Dee]

I like the moral of your story to never give up your dreams! Great job Akki!
I especially like these lines of your poem:
Race began again with a golden cup
everyone did their best
to win that race
everyone won this mighty cup

[Akki]

Thank you Dee for your kind words!

: )