One Day...

The poet is based on a little boy who have a lot of dreams so please read like in his way, Don't find logic in it is first poet of me sooo plzzzz Oh God ! Save me

One Day……

Somehow they will come,
when I became someone.

One day I became a King,
with have a mighty wing.
I will end the sorrow that day,
which coming into my kingdoms way. 

Somehow they will come,
when I became someone.

One day I became a Superhero,
with have a power of snow.
I will end the mighty villains, 

which coming into my alliance.

Somehow they will come,
when I became someone.

One day I became a men,
which have a lot of responsibilities.
Mom said then,
you are my true son which has a lot of abilities.

Somehow they will come,
when I became someone.

Written By -
Akshay Samel.

Author's Note

Hey please don't find any sense Because I have no any sense about poet but gives me reviews o what you wants really when you read this. I will accept any kind of reviews so don't hesitate to give reviews...

Reviews

[Southern_Writes]

I really thought it was beautiful, it isn't perfect but only because of the language translations. It isn't as smooth as it should be.



Somehow they will come,
when I become someone.

One day I became a King,
with a mighty wing.
I will end the sorrow that day,
which comes my kingdoms way.

Somehow they will come,
when I become someone.

One day I became a Superhero,
with the power of snow.
I will end the mighty villains,
which are coming into my alliance.

Somehow they will come,
when I become someone.

One day I became a man,
which has a lot of responsibilities.
Mom said then,
you are my true son which has a lot of abilities.

Somehow they will come,
when I become someone.

[Akki]

Thank you Kanas my friend!
Your feedback really means me a lot.
Can you please tell in which part I have to work hard in my writing.

[Southern_Writes]

We I changed it slightlyin my review above. It was minor things like became vs become and putting whichthat next to eachother. Just compare my version and yours and you will see the differences.

[Akki]

Sure. I will.
thank you for your honest review.

[siddhi]

i love this,.Keep it up and thanks for sharing...
kya baat hai but new ones are better from this one this is also cute and innocent writing of yours
but they are better

your frnd
siddhi

[Riddhi]

I really liked the way you carved your wonderful thoughts in this beautiful poem...Keep it up and thanks for sharing...

[Akki]

Thank you so much Ridhi!
: )

[jesserose99]

i love this, simply different, and at the same time gifts we should all be able to look within and recognize. I am sure that the son had always had lots of abilities, even without the powers bestowed upon him in the poem.

it makes me want to say to the boy, you are someone, and we are here.
great poem

[Akki]

Thanks Jasserose99!