The Happy Couple

A couple going to dinner

Its dark, the door swung slightly as couples walks into the room. Whispers of young lovers floated around with soft music that drifted behind ears of others who ignored as they chatted to each other.

 A man stood by the door, wearing a black suit and is equipped with a bow tie. He checks his Rolex watch every few minutes and shifted his polished shoes to look though the transparent doors that he stood next to. He ran his hand though his hair and his blackish brown eyes shone as he sees a taxi pulling up to the front, delighted on a certain scene that unfolded in front of his eyes.

A woman clad in glittering white dress along with leather black strap purse, was helped out of the sleek black taxi by the driver. Her lips curved with delight as the man went to retrieve her, flipping her long black hair behind her and placing her hand, which finger wore a silver-colored ring, on his hand.

They smiled to each other and chatted, their shoes, a pair of high heels and polished black shoes, tapped the ground softly as they walked into the building. They ignored the music and whispers of others, teasing each other as they neared their table. The man immediately sprang to move the woman’s chair, and was rewarded with a smile and a kiss on the check.

 The waiter, dressed in a long-sleeved white shirt and black pants, passed the menu to the couple. The man looked through it as the woman just placed hers on the table, untouched, a sign of trust that was given to the man. She watched him placing their order and looks pleased when he mentioned his choice for her, she started a conversation with him under the moon and in its light.

Their conversation comes to a stop as their food arrives, the man whispered into the waiter’s ears as the woman enjoys the aroma that comes from her plate, and the aroma that she currently enjoys is smell that she remembers in the first time they met. The smell of sweet bread that drifted into her nose entices her tongue, dipped in curry that she commented as the food that she love more than her love for the man.

The man clucked as he tucked into his meal, lobster which he knew that the woman enjoys. Breaking its hard shell, it crumbles easily as he pulls out pieces of its meat and leaned forward to offer the woman. The woman blushed deeply, red in color like a tomato as he signaled that he wanted to feed her and hesitated as she leaned forward to grip the piece of lobster’s meat between her teeth. She offered a piece of her bread to him, which he took eagerly.

They laughed as the man commented on the woman, who smacked him lightly on the shoulder. The man suddenly looked serious as he began to pat his pants, looking slightly panicked. The woman looked uncertainly at him and began to look at him with diffident eyes.

The man dropped to his knees and looked at the woman, whose eyes from scared into wonder. He ran his hand though his black hair and took out a small jewelry box, in result getting a gasp from the woman and wasting no time, He asked for her hand The woman was in shock, stunned, surprised b y the man, she continued to stare at him with disbelieve as the whole room became quiet, waiting for her answer that the man waited.

 Her hands, which flew to cover her mouth reached to touch his hand and she whispered into his ears. The man whooped in joy and hugged the woman as he heard her answer, she practically ran as he started to announce his love in front of the crowd but stayed calm enough for him to slip his ring on her finger. She immediately fled from the scene, dragging him behind her to stop him from doing even more drastic action. They left the restaurant as an engaged couple.

Author's Note

I have no experience in going to dinner or to dates, I hope that this essay could help me improve on points or real life situations to write and improve on. Don't hesitate to flame or comment. :)

Reviews

[Kyla H]

This was good overall, your writing technique (in my opinion) is perfect, no dialouge was needed to paint a picture or form their personalities. Well done.

[Searching 4 Serenity]

I'm kind by nature. So, I will at least say that I was able to follow the story. It did, however, confuse me a little. You've really gotta be careful of your THEN and NOW wording when writing a story. You'll get the hang of it. Writing doesn't always come naturally for everyone, but you show MUCH promise. Judging by your style, you seem to be much more of a poet than a story writer, like me.

[Shalini Dinesh]

The chapter flows good, and the description of each person was good too, i liked the flow, it sounded like a romantic clip from a movie.... i was visualizing as i read this... good work