Nightmares

I stood at the edge of a cliff

One that looks the way I imagine they do in Capetown

So beautiful

I wasn't afraid, though I was alone

And I stared into the sky above

My eyes pierced the parallel ocean below

And my cliff seemed to separate the two places you could be.

I screamed your name

Waiting for you to answer the echo

I waited

As if there was a chance you really would answer

I fell hard on my knees

And they should have shattered

I cried until I couldn't anymore

I cursed your name because I resented you

And I cursed your name because I was jealous of you

I wondered what it would be like to jump into the ocean

Alone.

I wondered what it would be like to see you waiting for me at the bottom

And this is why I don't like to sleep.

Reviews

[fattycbreezy52]

It's as if a depressed,tormented soul was speaking.What as if?It was.It's like you try hard to close your watery eyes and transport yourself to a world of temporary happiness for a while where atleast he will be whatever you would expect him to be.Alas!you cannot sleep.All you could experience is weltering, side by side and murmuring to yourself,
"Feelings die and go to your grave...die ,die die and never come back again"

[samanthaashley_]

Love the comment. Thanks so much!

[K. Bridgid]

I really liked these lines:

I fell hard on my knees
And they should have shattered
I cried until I couldn't anymore

Very powerful. Very relatable. I think we've all had that moment when someone we really care about suddenly isn't there anymore and it feels as if you've lost them forever.

[samanthaashley_]

I'm glad you could relate. thanks for reading :)

[E G TEN]

Would it be funny if you had jumped and then you woke up
Falling out of your bed,, ( happens to me a few times
I kid you not) just thought id bring a humorous intake
On my review" your poem although sad is lovely,
Full of passion, and speaks loyalty towards your significant
Half, Thanks for sharing! :-) :-P

[samanthaashley_]

that has definitely happened to me as well! or sometimes I really think I'm falling and wake up.

[SuspectGray]

A nightmare that creeps up on you.. the beautiful Capetown cliff that soon offers two lonely courses....the echo-less scream and the lonely plunge. Hands you a cup of coffee....stay awake!!!

[samanthaashley_]

hahahah I could definitely use some coffee!

[Coyote Poetry]

A emotional ride in the poetry.
"I screamed your name
Waiting for you to answer the echo
I waited
As if there was a chance you really would answer"
I like the places and question brought to life in the poetry. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[samanthaashley_]

thank you very much :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[KaoticOrder]

wow... wonderful and dark. very expressive and real good job!

[samanthaashley_]

thank you!!

[KaoticOrder]

Not a problem. I enjoyed it and can relate

[KaoticOrder]

This line is the one that stuck out to me the most:
"I screamed your name
Waiting for you to answer the echo
I waited
As if there was a chance you really would answer."

[sinNsincerity]

Nicely written and love the way you expressed yourself here!

[samanthaashley_]

thank you very much!

[Zac]

Very deep poem,
It is a very good read.
Hope to see more in the future

[samanthaashley_]

thanks so much!

[dan]

Sam, This is really intense, but lovely at the same time. It is said that true feelings sometimes manifest themselves in our dreams, so this may be a case of a guy who has done you wrong. You are willing to forgive and make nice but he seems unwilling to meet you halfway. You jump off of the cliff and meet him at the ocean floor, the point to which he had also jumped. As your breath leaves you, your eyes meet one last time...and you slyly smile, knowingly. This is really a well-written piece all around. Bravo! take care...dan

[samanthaashley_]

thank you for taking the time to read this, and for your comments!

[dan]

Please remember to review at least one of mine. And please send my read requests when you want me to review anything. Thanks, and have yourself a great day. take care...dan

[andrew mitchell]

A lot of emotions riding the waves here in turmoil adding to a great write SA Nicely expressed and liked the imagery:)

[samanthaashley_]

thanks, Andrew!

[micky]

Wow .....how taunting....take it from me i understand ur pain....i have intense insomnia...i love this piece...
Well done:)

[samanthaashley_]

thanks micky!