WHY?

i told you to hold it,

i told you to treasure it,

i told you not to break it!

I said " i love you"

you said "no"

you then throw it on the ground!

You've broken my heart!

i was never smart.

To tell someone like you

"I love you"

you bretrayed me!

Reviews

[LetiStoned]

wow wow wow, where do u get these

[Last Lying Look]

This one isn't too bad but there are a few errors.
With a little work it could be really great!
-Elissa :)

[...MysteryGirl...]

good but it can be better.

After i was never smart put a comma not a period.

the idea was good but you need to work on your flow.

I am just helping you and i will never be mean,

But i really think that you can write beautiful :)

[StoryTailor]

Not bad. A bit rusty but still. Pretty good.