When I Can't Sleep And Singing Sounds Like A Good Idea!!

Random ranting but I feel it's the truth.

My pain runs deep

It flows inside

 

You say I'm a creep

but I'm just at full stride

 

I cry

I live

I die

 

But have you even tried,

To Live?

 

NO! YOU JUST USE EVERYONE!
And EVERYTHING!

AND NEVER TRY TO LIVE PAST YOUR LIES!

 

Please don't take from my life.

To fuel the fire you call pride.

 

I've seen your pain.

Look in my eyes.

 

I won't lie.

I don't care.

 

So walk away.

I'm not afraid,

 

Anymore........ 

Author's Note

Comment Please!!!

Reviews

[Laura Maidah]

Ranting is not poetry. This is prose acting like a poem. The difference is that prose is the words in correct meaning. Poetry is the correct words for the correct meaning. Prose flows from point, connecting the reader to the author's destination. Poetry needs the precise words because it is more restricting. Nice effort. You have a lot to say. Definitely have a knack for capturing emotion. Keep writing!

[khalid]

i think you you should take of that modest dress you are putting and stop saying that you are not a good writer. writing such a nice poem is not such an easy work anybody can do. it is really wonderful in meanings and the flow..

[Maya Storm]

This sounds like a bullied situation, what the poem is about comes through.
It is not entirely cohesive, but you have the ingredience here for something good.

[salttydawg]

haha thank you, and I'm not really good with writing in itself. That's why I cam on here, so your comments have actually really helped thanks!

[Laura Maidah]

And never say sorry for yourself! It makes it easy to get trampled on!