Love

I started to think about when two people fall in love, who perhaps shouldn't...........but we can't always help who we fall in love with. This is based on an old flame from years ago only the outcome was different to my poem. I'm a hopeless romantic, so..

You fill up my mind with enticing thoughts
Around and around in my head is all sorts
Such wonderful erotic, sensual images
The tension has been building for ages
When at last they get their release
Will the turmoil finally cease?

You smile that smile, and I can't say no
I falter and know I should really go
Instead into your arms I flow
We kiss lustfully making me glow
Together we sigh and with haste undress
Together we writhe our shyness less

We move together with such animal lust
Until my fears are abated and dust
What was so wrong at the start
Now seems right in my heart
Forever and ever we have to be
For now you are my world you see

Sally Edwards
22/03/2008

Reviews

[Shadows of Sight]

I'm confused on this one.... Does this assume that Sexual Lust is the same thing as Love? or have do we assume, that these two have already gone through the mental processes of love, and are just getting to the physical? or is this a heated random moment of passion, like on a one night stand?
It's writen very well, and your images are vivid as always.
I just felt that it was about lust, not love. :) Just my opinion. :)

[DaGirlNxtDoor]

wow this was a very amazing piece...i rlly liked it x]

[Stacey Watts]

This is a very beautiful piece. I love the way is flows and the romantic qualities to it. Such a wonderful write.

[Jim Clarke]

I think this captures the sense of romantic lover between young lovers. Good job.

[Jessica M.]

i don't understand where the love is in this,
but i understand the desire for a fairytale ending.
:)

[Kenny]

Like it a lot!!!
p.s. please review mine!

[Dalaina Renee]

Wow, is the tyoing keys hot now? Lol

[Rockebah]

Again I love your poem. You are a spectacular writer. Good rhyme and rhythum.

[shadadakiya]

i agree with nature's feet,you could make two out of one lol,great work though ,just love is nothing like that (: but lust is

[(*^.^*)Vivi(*^.^*)]

Good input with words.=] i love the idea.

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Wow this is really great! The images you created were perfect! I loved the idea that this was about two people falling in love instead of out of love. It was good.