the butterfly

this poem has 2 subjects .one is ofcourse the butterfly and the butterfly also symbolises woman

i am a butterfly

an epitome of beauty

an expected perfection 

my beauty lies in the colors that i possess

and god makes me help in a beautiful process

i carry the magical beads

which helps the birth of new seeds

 

i love making the flowers bloom

and i give the lull a new boon

my colors exude a crunch of enigma 

a bunch of tentalising mystery 

which has always intrigued the history 

my subtle touch makes my affection travel

and let the happiness unravel

i love your real admire

not the wrong desire

don't hold me for too long 

don't force me to sing the sad song

let me retain my playful book

a pure bible like vibgyor outlook

but i am strong 

and i will walk all seasons long

i will never stop flying no matter of the devious tryings.

Author's Note

ignore the punctuations please :)

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i rarely if ever use punctuation myself.

i really like these lines:

"i love your real admire/ not the wrong desire"

excellent stuff.

i so do like this piece...two small suggestions..."tantalizing" is the spelling..

and i would leave out the description...let the readers get that on their own, and if not, they may see other things in your poem...and that makes it universal...which is the best we can hope for...to have readers identify in some way with our poetry.

nice work.

jacob

[sakshi arora]

thanks it really helped me :)

[Ayush Sinha]

I never knew u were so good at this stuff!!! I mean its so beautiful how u compared a butterfly with the women. I loved it. awesome.

[Angi]

What a lovely tribute to women! Butterflies are always so beautiful to watch fluttering around. I like how you tied them together. Angi~

[Shweta Singh]

And this butterfly bristled past me,leaving some color on my fingers,some on my mood...
Very alluring!

[phantomcristal]

im not good with punctuaion myself ... anyway its good

[Devanshu Rajput]

The amazing piece really left me amazed. A nice poem for the beautiful creature butterfly. Which we regularly see in our surroundings. This adorable butterflies is a one of the most lovely god given gift.


You have power to translate your feelings, which many writers are lacking of.

Pen on.

Devanshu

[Sid]

Very nicely written, i like the way you have used the butterfly to signify women. Given the horrors against women that have surfaced in India over time, people need to read this and become more appreciative. Really like these lines
"don't hold me for too long
don't force me to sing the sad song"
..great write!

[sakshi arora]

well india is rising and women too though we have our problems and we l rise for sure
women all over the world have gone through such situations in the past be it europe or US and i am sure we l rise and eradicate this :) issue

[Stan]

I absolutely loved this. The way you have used a butterfly as a euphemism for a young woman is wonderful.

[sakshi arora]

thanks alot .it means alot

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Beautifully written, sakshi. I love butterflies, have 2 bushes with blue flowers that attract them.

[sakshi arora]

thanks a lot it means a lot

[zainul]

Very lovely write.
I am amazed by the lines:
"don't hold me for too long
don't force me to sing the sad song"

I assure you it is a piece of rainbow with many colors and wonderful meanings.

[sakshi arora]

thank you sir, it means a lot :)

[zainul]

You are always welcome,young friend.:)

[Baby Ricochet]

Beautiful poem with a dual meaning. Great Job Sakshi