Flippin coins under street lights

It was a crowded room

but

then again.... it always is.

 

The smell of cheap cigars and even cheaper booze lingers..

up and down.

 

The type of place you could walk into decent

and come out nickel and diming or worse.

 

Yeah there was always worse.

 

The two bit pimp that sends his girls in to work some poor yup looking to have a good time.

the schmuck never knew what hit him.

 

Your old timers claming there section at the bar, looking for some

fountain of life at the end of a bottle.

its never there.

 

Poor b******s first in, last out

 

The dealer by the dimly limited phone booth

the same booth you cant use cuz he has been waiting for a call

for the past 5 years.

 

The place was crowded like it always was

with every hooker two bit thug and wannabe badass west of the boarder.

 

and it stunk

 

My only comfort

 

The cold steel of my desert eagle inside my shoulder holster

and the lovely look of stupidity

when I pull the trigger

 

Author's Note

Pretty much picture 1920's and Dick Tracy reading it i was bored and wanted to play with a theme- maybe the whole narration/poem for a movie vibe.

Reviews

[meltingtuba]

Paints a clear picture. I could definitely hear Dick Tracy in my head. The end is abrupt and upsetting. I don't think it fits.

[theladyjai]

i im not that great with my my words but i could feel it. different, descriptive, interesting. like the beginning of a story or something.

[KEENAMARiE]

before i even read what you added i pictured crap shooters and dolls. flows my imagination smoothly. i like.

[emz]

I really loved this... i could picture the whole scene that you set.. like film noir.. well written.
well done



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