Time Paralyzed

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I paralyzed time with a whisper

it acknowledged my call

we conversed

comparing the present

reminiscing flashbacks of the past

foreshadowing the future

as

I questioned you

you engineered your existence into obscurity

with an explusion of wind

Reviews

I really like the poem up to the "foreshadowing the future" I am not sure what the rest of the poem meant or what the significance of it is in relatonship to the rest of the poem.

[Ed Hart]

I don't usually do this, but you're such a fine poet that I reluctantly point out to you (in the interests of preserving the economy of words that seems natural to your talent) that "reminiscing flashbacks" includes "of the past" without saying it.