Prologue

 Preface

 

Lost. I was lost with a broken heart. I had been stupid to do this, but I felt it was the only way, my last hope. The rain pounded on the window as the windshield wipers moved furiously back and forth. I stepped harshly on the brake bringing the car to a screeching halt at the side of the road. Trying desperately to catch my breath, tears streamed down my face to land between my hands that were clenched to the steering wheel.

No more.

I broke open the door into the pouring rain and ran toward the glimmering guardrail letting the rain pelt my face to hide my tears. Finally, I had lost my last grip of hope and control—and reality took its cold place in my heart. Leaning over the guardrail, I peered down the cliff side at the rushing, roaring waves below. I gripped tight to the guardrail and climbed over the side. The wind thrashed about throwing the rain all around me and wrapping my hair around my face.

I stood motionless thinking to myself.

What point is there to living if everything you love has been taken away from you? Why continue? How am I supposed to keep moving forward if I’ve left you behind? Why did you leave?

I pondered on my last thought as I gripped tight to the guardrail leaning forward over a most certain death. I took a deep breath hoping to revive my broken heart, so it would awaken to stop me from leaning forward anymore. Tears ran from my face, thus making it impossible to differentiate themselves from the droplets of rain as they fell.

A sudden panicked scream from behind me caused me to slip for a moment waking me up from my broken sleep. I looked at my surroundings and climbed back over to safe, solid ground on the other side of the guardrail. I slid down to the cold, hard ground. I brought my knees to my chest and wrapped my arms tight around my legs to try to hold myself together and to keep from falling apart.

Reviews

[Stephen Scaggs]

All I can say is wow. This prologue piece is an amazing piece. Though you should look at your word usage such as in the second paragraph, "broke open the door." Unless she literally broke the door open, it should be "I opened the door widely as if it were stuck." My word isn't much since I don't even have a college degree. n_n But I hope my words helped.

[Courtney]

Nice preface! The details of the rain are great, and nice bits of aliteration. I *love*: "reality took its cold place in my heart"

I do recoment removing the words "that were" from the sentence of your first paragraph, that sentence is a little wordy. Also you mention guardrail three/four times all rather close to each other try replacing one with rail/railing, or "the barrier" etc.

I also really enjoy the phrase "broken sleep" and the other words and phrases that implie broken.