Wind

A long journey
Up a big mountain
I sat against the window
The warm air burst through the open window

Chatter surrounded me
Giggles of the silly girls in the back
The boys laughing at the young girls
I sat perfectly silent

A few listened to music
Some read their books
No one seemed to mind the crowded bus
I know I didn't

I watched the the road
I stared at the hills
The trees
The birds that seemed to follow the bus

I blocked out all noise
And remained silent
I was allowing myself
To get lost within my mind

I was so in love with a boy
On that long trip
I knew what I knew
And wouldn't let anything change my mind

But in those few short days
Of wondering around
Hoping to get his love in return
All I found was an emptiness

And in only a few short days
I realized something
The love I had once given him
Didn't belong to the boy who I sat next too

It belonged to the boy
He once was
And would never be again

So on that long trip back 
My love for him
Slowly slipped away
Like the wind outside the window

It blew around my face for a moment
And then vanished...

Author's Note

This is an amazing song to listen too while you read, this is a real experience by the way.

Reviews

[OT]

oh a great profound poem - a deep think poem, lets us think about so many things!! very well written, and the structure is strong too, with good content! the song compliments the poem very well but it stands on its own as well! the ending really hits you! good stuff!!

[Abbie]

very well thought out. love it good job

[Greg Skura]

Great Poem! Well we give our love to those which we choose although they are not always interested in returning the love sometimes unfortunate but true.thank you for sharing!

[Calypso]

This inspiered me. I wish I could have wrote this.

[Undying Glory]

i guess this poem deserves far more than one-liner reviews!
you're right, that song really adds depth to this poem, and i really thought that ending sure hammered home the point of this poem. i mean yeah, how painful is it to look at someone and realise he/she was no longer the one you knew?

"So on that long trip back
My love for him
Slowly slipped away
Like the wind outside the window

It blew around my face for a moment
And then vanished..."
let's hope that nothing like that happens to us again.
great work!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Hard painful journey to learn ones love has changed! Great write!

[G. K. Bostic]

There are parts of this that are really good, like, "It belonged to the boy
He once was
And would never be again" but when I read the whole piece it seems a bit too wordy. I wonder if it wouldn't have a more poetic flow if you eliminated some of the articles, some extra words, and maybe more present tense. For example:
A long journey
Up a mountain
I sit against the window
Warm air bursts through

Chatter surrounds me
Giggles of silly girls in the back
Boys laughing at young girls
I sit perfectly silent

I hope I'm not being too presumptuous...these are just some of my thoughts. Please let me know if you feel this is too critical. I'd just like to help.

[Sarusai Hiryu]

A nice refutation of "Love alters not when it alteration finds"

[HopelesslyDevoted]

beautiful poem with a beautiful message

[Jim Parson]

Both a physical journey and a journey of self-awareness and discovery. I really like this one, Sarah. Nice job!