Coming back

She couldn't believe it
She never expected it
Her heart was pounding
And shock covered her face

He stood there
Staring down on her
His eyes were filled with fear
And she knew he was trying to find a glimpse of hope

She stood before him
Completely speechless
Tears swelled into her eyes
They ran down her cheek

He pleaded with her
To forgive him
To take him back
To love him again

She looked up at his face
Rain surrounded them
Tears ran down her face
And then it happened

She placed her hand on the side of his face
She gently kissed him on the cheek
And then she shook her head and said
"No..."

She walked away and didn't look back
Because she knew if she did
She would fall apart
And give in

Author's Note

Again I couldn't think of an ending

Reviews

[Dream Slave]

Stanza before the last= Power

Overall very very enjoyable, with all the visuals, and all the raw emotion. Don't worry about the ending which you couldn't think about... the one you gave it pretty much gave the piece what it needed... the feeling of saying no, even when you want to say yes, for the sake of preventing something from happening again.

[Abbie]

kinda a sad story but still really good


100/100

[Linear]

A sad tale, when one wont take the chance to try again, hearts to fragile. good work

[Coyote Poetry]

A very strong poem with a sad and wise story. Better to run then to give someone the opportunity to hurt you again. I like the flow of the story and the very good ending. Last line is true. Pity can overcome wisdom. A excellent poem.
Coyote

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the ending is fine...fitting indeed..it's hard to walk away from a failed relationship..but sometimes the best thing..

[Undying Glory]

this was very heart-rending work, i sure liked this one a whole lot. such a saddening ending to this one, and in few other cases does that word "No" have such earth-shattering power. this was very well-done.
and hey, i did hear a song that seemed to reflect this whole feeling! It's titled "The Promise" by In This Moment, featuring Adrian Patrick. you really should listen to it!

"She placed her hand on the side of his face
She gently kissed him on the cheek
And then she shook her head and said
"No..."

She walked away and didn't look back
Because she knew if she did
She would fall apart
And give in"
world-shattering words!

[Tate Morgan]

I think it needs to tell us who the two are.We cant attach to them emotionally without knowing who they are.Other than that it was fine .I realize it isnt my own I tend to be more partial to th rhyming in poetry,But I can still appreciate others wor

[tynamite]

Whoa! This is amazing and too much. The storytelling in this is insane. Who else does this? I've favourited it.

[Jim Parson]

I can't imagine a more perfect ending. The poem would not have worked without it, just the way you've said it.

[JanieB]

I like the ending Sarah. Good write.