A stain

I ware your memory
A stain on my shirt
A stain I can't remove
No matter how hard I try

You are like that one wine stain
That no matter how hard you try
You just can't remove it
And you try with all your might

You are still always around
No matter how hard I try to get away
No matter how far I run
Your face follows me

The memories haunt my mind
And no matter how hard I try
I can't erase them 
They are etched into my mind

And my heart
You left a permanent stain 
A permanent footprint
A scar

You are like a horrible stain
That no matter how hard I try
You'll always be there

Author's Note

This poem was inspired by this song

Reviews

[MissWordSmith]

the first line it should be i WEAR not where.
likes: I think the repetitious scheme worked here. it was like a drone going on and on and on, and though it was a little annoying, it got the point across, and somehow conveyed the tired, fed-up feeling of the poem and the stain that never leaves.
dislikes:there were a LOT of grammatical mistakes, some lines were just left hanging, and again (i think i'm saying this too often) but, you're not telling us HOW IT MAKES YOU FEEL!
Put your feelings of FRUSTRATION, ANNOYANCE, HELPLESSNESS, INTO YOUR WORDS!

Irritating, it scratches away at my skin
A blade going deeper and deeper
Line a wine stain upon a cloth
Silently eating me, sickening seeper (from seep:to sink in slowly)

Something like that! I dunno!

oh, one more like: the wine reference, definitely an inspiring idea there!

[Abbie]

it should be wear not where. but any way This is a very good poem


100/100

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good strong metaphor...nice job

[Coyote Poetry]

I like how you told this poem. Using stain as the key words made this poem special and different. Great story in the poem. Some stains are permanent. Ain't easy to erase. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Brook Hughes]

Good poem! I enjoyed reading this!

[Undying Glory]

very nice song you've embedded here, and i just love this poem you've written here, and isn't it amazing sometimes how people can just remain in our memories? good job here!

[Marie Harrison]

That's right the stain goes both ways. If you are hurting over him, chances are he's hurting over you too. We meet people who impact us for the rest of our lives in a good way or bad. Beautiful poem.

[G. K. Bostic]

I like, "You left a permanent stain
A permanent footprint
A scar" and hope that you know that scars may never disappear, but they do fade.
I saw that someone already told you about the word where which should be wear. That was a little distracting but is easily fixed. :) I would get rid of the word 'that' in the next to last line of the poem... Just a thought....but okay the way it is.

[JanieB]

Good work.

[Periac]

i absolutly adore the wine reference....suits the message and the aura of what you want perfectly...great job