sarah, you were there for him. i don't know of any way that you could have been there for him any more than you already were. you were a great and loyal friend to him, especially in his time of need. i know that that was also the time when it started to go down hill, but for the time that you were together- you were much better than he deserved.
There are some things in life we can't change even if we wanted to. I know the painful feeling of regret. It's never easy knowing that somebody you've loved and cared about has passed away. I understand how you feel, completely.
-Red
Very sad poem. Some people can relate to this I'm pretty sure. I'm one of them.
I don't know you very well but I'm going to say this anyways. Don't regret anything it only weighs you down. My grandpa said that to me, the night he was in the hospital. Just keep your chin up and be happy for what you have! Keep writing!
Regret teaches us to walk softer and listen more. Friends are the one's who will sit with you when you sad and listen. Laugh and dance when the things in life fall right. Life is learning. Forgiveness is easily gain back by being a friend. A excellent poem.
Coyote
This is a sad and touching peice, sometimes when someone else is hurting, we shy away from them, not because they are hurting, but because we aren't sure what to say in some of these moments and don't want them to hurt anymore than they already are. Beautiful work..
The past is just that, the past, and there is nothing that can be done to change what is done. Just got to keep living and try to forget about the what ifs. Just gotta learn from it and be glad that at least it wasn't a never was.
I didn't feel this. Sorry. I mean, okay I get what you're saying, but you're NOT explaining how it makes you FEEL. Tell us, the readers, what this wishing is all about. Not the facts, but how it makes you feel bad, how you're breaking, how you can't breathe with sorrow. You have to SHOW us what the experience made YOU feel.
Facts - anyone can write them. It's the EMOTION put to facts that make them stand out, make them noticeable.
I felt the ending was weak. "And I am sorry it can't be changed" Almost like you don't care, I feel a little defiance there, like, "I can't do a damn thing more so deal with it."
I got the impression that you are sorry for not acting when the person needed you, but you're also hurt by this person, almost like you aren't too fond of them, or hold a grudge for something they did.
Look, if you wanted me to say "it was awesome, i loved it, bla bla bla" I could. But I wouldn't be helping you in any way. This is what I thought, and you don't have to agree, take it with a pinch of salt. But I know you can do better than this.
My name is Sarah just another Sarah, to go along with the millions of other Sarah's hehe anyway umm...I am really bad at spelling C and grammar it's a pain in the a*s so...yeah I won't U review books .. more..