Life

I watched him closely
From a few feet away
I watched helplessly

The flames from the cars grew more intense
But he didn't seem to notice that
He only had his eyes on her

He bent down to her
And clutched her tightly
He held her lifeless body

He pulled her as close to him as possible
His screams ripped through the sky like a knife
It shot through my heart

His pain seemed to drown me
He held on to her
Like if he held on tight enough
Life would re-enter her body

His tears flowed down his cheek
Like rain
He didn't bother to brush them off his face

His eyes stayed on the women in his arms
I could here him whisper things to her
Whisper his goodbyes

He let her go
I ran over to him
I tried to wrap my arms around him

But when I looked down at the women
I realized something

I was the woman....

Author's Note

this was a dream I had

Reviews

[Amy Vaughn]

i LOVE this. I really do. I was going to say "His screams ripped through the sky like a knife/It shot through my heart "was my favorite, because I really felt it, but I absolutely love the twist at the ending. I also like the idea of life re-entering her body. So, so good.

[Kate Hunter]

highly intriguing. I would have woken up drenched in a cold sweat. Well written keep it up.

[Sleeping Maiden]

I love this! So tragic.. i love the feelings in this poem. =) Nice write!! =D

[A Risen Heroine.]

This piece sent chills down my spine as I read

"But when I looked at the women
I realized something

I was the woman...."

I love that line..
Good job!

~A Fallen Heroine~

[Rikkevi Rue]

whoa! this is awesome! totally powerful and impinging and dripping really is its content and what it conveys. One of your best!

[Alicia™]

You have really interesting dreams! I love this.

[Brook Hughes]

How sad. Great poem though. One of your poems that I believe is your best. Great job!!!

[Alicia Schroeder]

I like the twist at the end, what a beautiful peice. It sounds like your longing to be lifted by love, though i'm not sure, but either way I loved this peice, it was sad and yet beautiful, all wrapped into one..

[Calypso]

WOW!! This was amazing. You have out done your self here.

[Geralyn Miller]

I would call this a nightmare, not a dream. Great imagery, I could feel the flames, the onlookers helplessness. You are more than "just another Sarah", you are very special, Sarah, the poet.

[G. K. Bostic]

Your vivid description made me feel his pain. This is beautifully written, and the ending totally unexpected and very effective. Excellent!