Rainy day

The young girl watches the sky
She watches it intently
Hoping rain will come

She says a small prayer to God
Hoping God will hear her small prayer
She watches the gray clouds tease her

No rain comes
The clouds make the air cold
But the girl doesn't move from her place on the lawn

All she wants is the rain
Everyone ignores her
No one hears her prayer to God

Except God hear her
He smiles at the request and asks
Why do you want rain so badly?

The young girl replied
In a soft almost afraid voice
"It's the only way for me to cry"

 

Author's Note

ok be nice this is an experiment just tell me how u liked it

Reviews

[the_stoic]

a few errors but they get overshadowed by the theme that's portrayed .. i have heard that grown ups feel comfortable crying when it rains . but coming from a little girl it makes my heart sad ....

ps- i have a write with rain as the theme .. check it out . it's titled "salvation"

[JanieB]

Oh, gee.. what a sweet ending.

[Geralyn Miller]

this is so sad, I have known children who never cried at home because it led to punishment, particularly true of children who are victims of parental abuse.

[tynamite]

This poem is a bit weird to me, it's one of those different ones.

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Though the work is good..few words can be omitted to create the same impact..!!

Great efforts..!!

[Calypso]

Aww this is sad. I wish I could hug this little girl.

[Coyote Poetry]

A kind and beautiful story. You brought me in and you gave me a very good ending. I like the set-up of the story. Even God would be surprise for her reason for the rain. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[PoetryofProvidence]

liked it

[HopelesslyDevoted]

O.o awwwww........

[Kelly M.]

This is sad, but so sweet! Full of passion that comes from the heart!