Abuse

A tinny child
Watched as her parents tore each other a part
She was too small to understand
But her mothers tears explained everything

She was practically a baby
And she watched as her father's words
Broke her mothers heart
She hated him

She grew to be a young women
She saw as her mother put on a fake smile
She watched as her mom pretended to be ok 
She wondered why her mom stuck around

She didn't know what her mom was feeling
She couldn't understand completely
But she knew enough to let her hatred grow
For the man who did this too her mom

She grew into a women
Independent
Free
Responsible

But she would never forget
The abuse
The fear
The pain

That her father inflicted
The memory of him
Made her sick
And angry

And every man that tried to get close
She pushed away
Out of fear
That she would make the same mistake her mom did

She would love a man
Who would hurt her
Abuse her
And that she wouldn't have the strength to leave

No one could convince this women
That not every man was her father
No every man would hurt her
Betray her

But the memory of her father
Kept sneaking back
And that memory didn't allow her
To commit to anyone

She will live forever in fear
Because of a man
Who damaged her
To the point of no return     

Author's Note

Honestly I can't say what made me write this, a little was taken by talking to people, some is from a friends experience idk please rate and review!

Reviews

[MuSe Ampoule]

Good job with this. Tough topic and expressive. Structure and flow is good...few spelling/grammar that could be easily cleaned up.

I agree with Cassandra's review...this could end without the last line and be better..."point of no return" is a cliche and doesn't add to the effectiveness of this piece.

[Shawn Killian]

This is a messed up subject your writing about and i have to give you credit for aproaching it, whereas most writers don't

[cassandra violet]

I really liked the way in which you wrote this poem, especially this stanza where you listed who she was as a woman-
"She grew into a women
Independent
Free
Responsible"
It made the poem flow nicely!
However, my only honest suggestion is the last line, the ending. "The point of no return" is often over-used and for such a good poem I think it would be amazing if the last line would have drawn on a more unique image.

[Calypso]

If there's on thing that makes me mad, it's abuse and you were able to show it in a unique light.

[Intern'l Shultzfeather]

Killer insight which is perfect according to you, abuse carrying on in identifiers from mom, does happen a lot but not always. You see it. You do not need to ride with. Sarah is growing about.

[Blossom]

I like the emotion in this. its beautiful and painful. The composition of this is amazing.

[JanieB]

Mental abuse..so very damaging! Well done.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

this is a great poem sarah, i think this is the best one you have written so far. thanks for posting this. love the picture btw ;)

[nono]

I wrote 2 poems like this a long time ago... "Her only friend" and "The abandon Child" Very awesome read, and so deep in feeling. Keep up the great work!! I love it, it's a horrible thing that shouldn't have to happen. I love this poem, it is just very strong. I can't wait to read more of your writing. Abuse is just sick, and I'll never understand what drives people to do so.

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like so many people who have lived through abuse as a child, fear is a overwhelming feeling that they carried through life..I suppose, the answer is to live for the now and try and not let the experiences taint your decisions in your own life..I am sure it is harder said than done..but worth it..I am sure

[Adrien Hupp]

abuse is just sick and wrong. people don't understand what it does to traumatize the person who is getting abused. great poem though:D