Abuse

A tinny child
Watched as her parents tore each other a part
She was too small to understand
But her mothers tears explained everything

She was practically a baby
And she watched as her father's words
Broke her mothers heart
She hated him

She grew to be a young women
She saw as her mother put on a fake smile
She watched as her mom pretended to be ok 
She wondered why her mom stuck around

She didn't know what her mom was feeling
She couldn't understand completely
But she knew enough to let her hatred grow
For the man who did this too her mom

She grew into a women
Independent
Free
Responsible

But she would never forget
The abuse
The fear
The pain

That her father inflicted
The memory of him
Made her sick
And angry

And every man that tried to get close
She pushed away
Out of fear
That she would make the same mistake her mom did

She would love a man
Who would hurt her
Abuse her
And that she wouldn't have the strength to leave

No one could convince this women
That not every man was her father
No every man would hurt her
Betray her

But the memory of her father
Kept sneaking back
And that memory didn't allow her
To commit to anyone

She will live forever in fear
Because of a man
Who damaged her
To the point of no return     

Author's Note

Honestly I can't say what made me write this, a little was taken by talking to people, some is from a friends experience idk please rate and review!

Reviews

[MuSe Ampoule]

Good job with this. Tough topic and expressive. Structure and flow is good...few spelling/grammar that could be easily cleaned up.

I agree with Cassandra's review...this could end without the last line and be better..."point of no return" is a cliche and doesn't add to the effectiveness of this piece.

[ATaekwondo]

In my opinion the way you describe abuse is very detailed, sometimes a wounded heart can never love with the fear of being hurt. Keep up writing ;) I love the poems

[Treo LeGigeo]

Very strong and very sad, great poem.

[deeps]

WOW this is strong and sad. really gripping, hard to really talk about and read.

[M Garcia]

nice write and thanks for sharing.

[Coyote Poetry]

Abuse leave a woman or man in a bad situation. Hard to heal from seeing or feeling abuse. I saw my mother abused. Taught me to be kind and never hit a woman. A powerful poem. No excuse for abuse. I told my daughters. If someone is mean when you date. They will get worst.
Coyote

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god-this is tough to read, but
i think through your writing
you intimated the emotions-
(as powerful as they are)
very well...wonderful write.

B/W

[PoetryofProvidence]

shared on FB as the last few days were dedicated to abuse , and I liked this as it rings true for many women....

[Livana Lowell]

It seems more like a story than a poem, but a sadly common feeling. Scars remain from childhood all the time.

this line confused me, though: "She was too small to understand/But her mothers tears explained everything" To who is this directed at, the reader, or the child? Her mother's tears explained what? That could be so much length in that line that would increase the greatness of this poem. I liked the use of the word child, meaning that it could be ay child out there.

I felt that each stanza could be lengthened and more explicit. It seemed like there was some cut off or time lapse that confused me or placed a thirst for more details.

I actually like the ending. I didn't think it was cliched. But I guess Cassandra read more.

Anyways, work on it some more.

[Robin]

and such are the effects of abuse, some suffer worse fates , some can move on past it , all remember ..