The proposal

The rain falls
Everything is a blur
Shock crosses his face
As he stares at her face

She rejected him
His proposal
He wanted to marry her
But she had other plans

He rose up from his knee
He had asked her in the rain
Because he knew how much she loved the rain
She found rain the most romantic thing

He had spent weeks planning it
Waiting for the perfect moment
He wrote out what he would say
His hopes were high

But here he was
Wet
And alone...

He loved her
He knew that
She knew that
But it wasn't enough for her

His hopes had been dashed
By only 8 words
"I am not ready for that kind of commitment"

Author's Note

I don't understand people that can live with someone for years, even just date someone for years but not agree to marry that person because they are afraid to be tied down, or they think it will cause to much change. Let me know what u think about this poem I know that traditionally the women informs the guy that marriage is out of the question try to think outside of the box

Reviews

[Rikkevi Rue]

do you want me to critique the poem, or the nature of people? For surely people, especially in matters of the heart, are fickle...unreasonable, fey, stubborn, unkind even...! That said,

In prose your write has impingement because it is so close to reality, like a video of a real event as opposed to a "dramatic reenactment." Real life is harsh, brutal, uncaring...fast, exhilarating volatile. That emotion and the disappointment and heartbreak of rejection are conveyed. Art is the quality of communication...This write communicates, though not warm and fuzzy it gets the message across

[Alicia™]

Aww, that's sad… I agree with what you said. While I do also think it takes time to figure out if that person is the one you want to spend the rest of your life with, after a while it's long enough.

[Coyote Poetry]

Those 8 words can sent a world out of control. A very good poem. I could feel the disappointment and sadness in the words. I like how you ended the poem. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Zane]

This was wonderful.

[Dushyant Thadani]

WOW!! The work is strikingly sad, but still so true at so many many levels. Many people can relate to this work, because there is a definite truth to it. Thank you for writing this

[JanieB]

So sad..well written.

[Marie Harrison]

Believe me it happens quite often. She's better off walking away and not turning back. Some are just afraid of commitment.

[Intern'l Shultzfeather]

rejection and naivete hit strongly Ms. Willingham. Rejection sustained well and felt by the reader. Thank You Sarah

[Wondering Mind]

It's interesting that you chose to trade places.

[Calypso]

Wow that would suck if what was told in this poem really happened. I don't undersatnd either why people can date forever, but never marry.