My perfect kiss

We walked slowly in the mist of the night
We held hands
His sweet eyes gazed down at me
My heart skipped a beat

We slowly strolled down the lane
The Christmas lights glittered brightly
All the way down the lane
There were bright lights

As we walked he stopped
And paused for a moment
Our hands were still intertwined
He smiled at me

I gazed up at him
Curious as to what he was doing
All of a sudden he pulled me close to his body
He wrapped his arms around my waist

And for a moment
He just stared at me
Like he was taking a picture with his mind
He moved some hair out of my face

Then he bent down
And sweetly pressed his lips against mine
A cold breeze blew through
But neither one of us felt it

His kiss was sweet
Tender
But full of passion
And romance

It started to rain gently
But neither of us cared
I ran my fingers through his hair
He gently lifted me slightly off the ground

But then all of a sudden
Something happened
Something I hadn't expected
Something terrible
I woke up

Alone....

Author's Note

I have never been kissed and I am 17 *sigh* but this is how I picture my first kiss. I hope it happens just like this :-) hey a girl can dream right! haha

Reviews

[quinfinn]

this is so beautifully touching and sweetly romantic that i was in the moment and feeling your emotion. sweet 16 and never been kissed, it will come along. prince charming is out there somewhere and he will ride up on his white stallion and sweep you off your feet. what a lovely poem !

[Lime-Eater]

I love it! well, except for the "I woke up" part. I was reading this like man thats romantic the it said i woke up and i was al like, that sucks.

[Cynthia]

OH, that's soooo sweet untill the last! I mean, I am breathless on your desciption of the kiss!!! AWWWW!!! That's so SWEET and ROMANTIC!!!!!!!!!!This gotta to be every girls' dream! Kisses like that is the best! However, it's so sad when we realize it's all a dream and nothing ELSE. I WISH I can get a kiss like that soon as I grow up, and I HOPE you can get a kiss as you wish soon too! Amazing!!!!!

[Coyote Poetry]

Those sweet dreams are alright. I heard said. Dreams are the highway into a life and future. If you pay attention to them. I like the poem. You set the writer up for a surprise ending. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Alicia™]

This has gotta be every girl's dream! Other than the ending though, of course, haha. I did like how it added a twist to it, though.

[Dark Empress]

I think this is sweet besides waking up and being alone. The kiss was sweet though. Great write. :)

[David]

By 'I hope it happens just like this' I hope you mean without the waking up and realising you are alone...
But yes, things happen, people go in and out of our lives, sometimes the one you love and live with for the rest of your life is your contrast or your compliment or even in between, but time will tell, and only time.
Good luck with that first kiss! d:P

[.]

I was really buying into this and then BAM ..the ending..first kiss? ahhh..I think I fretted about it for what seemed like forever...if this is what you want...you make it happen..dont settle for anything less :)

[Eternal.Dreamer]

I can see that you are indeed a Romantic(with capital R).
Good poem and imagery.
Anyway, a kiss, especially the first kiss can not be planed, maybe it will be better than how you imagine it ;)

[Elephant Noses]

It's a fantastic premise, very romantic and a good image of a white wintery setting. There are a lot of kissing stories though, and I want to see yours stand out! Reword some more cliched phrases "my heart skipped a beat" "he sweetly pressed his lips against mine" and make the feelings your own. Even if you've never experienced this before, let the the feelings grow differently for you than the stories you've heard or images you've seen. I want to hear your voice in it.
And as for this being a dream, if you choose to keep the ending this way, amp up the dream imagery in the beginning. Use the boundless creativity of dream space to make your descriptions more surreal, i maginable and "curious" as you say

[Ry]

Alright. You had me until it got sad, honestly. I was speechless and breathless, and then all happy thoughts disappeared once I got to the last stanza. I understand the feeling, I really do, and I sincerely hope that you get to experience one of those amazing moments soon, because they really are amazing. Good luck =)