someday

you told me you would always be there

you promised me you wouldn't break me

you swore you would protect my heart

 

but all you did was stand there and watch

you watched me scream and cry

you watched as they tore me to shreds

 

you didn't care...

 

the world started moving in slow motion

no one noticed me not even you

I started walking alone

 

you hurt me more than anyone else could

and you didn't even care

 

you thought a fake apology would put me at ease

why?

so that the guilt wouldn't get to much for you to take?

 

I want the guilt to get to much for you

I want you to understand what I felt

I want you to see the tear stains that are on my heart

 

and then it will be my turn to stand there

I will get to stand there and not flinch at your pain

it will be my turn

 

someday....

Author's Note

This is an old poem

Reviews

[MissWordSmith]

I'm guessing that you wrote this when you were still experimenting with writing. Though you accuse this person of fake apologies, the idea of ''everyone else tearing you to shreds" almost makes the reader feel like you yourself have set a target on this one person to drop all the blame for your hurt on. I'm loving your writing so far, because it really makes me sit up and think! Your concepts are so raw and inspired and just bring out basic, untamed human emotion so well. Keep writing!

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Strong one..!!!

[reminder]

Wow, powerful! I like the raw emotions- so angry and sorrowful. It really hit me. Well done!

[Shannon Math]

I love this poem. Good job with it.! :)

[Sunny Skye]

I really agree with this poem. I like it very good. Good Job.

-SkyeBlanco-

[Coyote Poetry]

A strong point was made in your poem. People who run away when we need them. They are not true friends. I don't believe in revenge. I believe karma is a fair judge. The good or bad will come back to us in the end. A very strong ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Cynthia]

I agree, the last line of this poem give a very strong feeling to the whole poem! Amazing Job!

[Marie Harrison]

Great rant. I bet you feel much better.

[Calypso]

Well written. My heart aches for you.

[Arsenic Nemesis]

Old or new, it doesn't matter, it's still bloody brilliant either way. That last line was just amazing, really adds depth to the poem and seems to draw it out too - fantastic! Keep up the good work!~