secrets

burry all your secrets
hide them away and
never remember them again
your life is spinning out of control
inside this suicidal world
i know theres an end
is it gonna save you?
is this what life is?

memories are dying all around you
nothing you do will make them stay
fading away with every breath
you keep on dying because you love to live

all i wanna know is why
you always push everyone away
why you always have to lie

somewhere inside
this suicidal world
you struggle to survive
all those around you
continue to break
look around
this lifes not easy

decieving all those around you
lies are your best friend
hiding who you really are
cold hearted and alone
with no one to turn to
all your secrets are coming alive
you can't run from what you are
no one can run that long

labeled a liar
called you out on everything
you never took responsibility
for everything you've done

memories are dying all around you
nothing you do will make them stay
fading away with every breath
you keep on dying because you love to live

all i wanna know is why
you always push everyone away
why your so quick to place the blame

you don't even see your the problem
not everyone else
it's all a choice you've made

your lies will be taken
to the grave
and in the end you'll find
that your all alone no one cares
or ever loved you

if you could take it all back
and start over from the beginning
you should start by loving yourself
no more lies just to fit in

it's time to say goodbye
to what you've become
take a moment to realize
that you don't have to live just to die

Reviews

[Allison]

This good! I really like it! Who is it about?

[Sexy P3nguin]

IT had a strong messaage behind it and I really could feel the emotion as if you were talking to me in person
Great job

[Lindsay]

i really liked the intense focus of this poem. there was a clear theme and a clear message. it's sad but i get the feeling that there's underlying anger there as well. just remember that when you're saying "you are," the contraction is actually "you're" instead of "your." there were a few instances of that. otherwise, great job. i liked it.

[Katie]

this poem screams loneliness.. its such an awful feeling to have and you captured every aspect of it. great job!

[Undying Glory]

excellent poem, it's really great. nothing short of brilliant

[Matt]

this poem is awesome.
yea ive been this guy
that your describing.
but i decided i was done running and i got my s**t together..
its great keep it up

[Chelsea.]

Wow.
Well, your point is very strong in this.
The poem is good, yet, seems to drag on a bit.
Other than that, nice job.

[Tate Morgan]

Its an interesting topic I think it may be too long.But It tells the tale that leads to lonelliness

[Ross Saunders]

Some nice language here, although I do think you could do more with concrete concepts and specifics.

[Raven Wilson]

Other than a few spelling errors i found this very engaging. It really took me for a whirl, as suicidal emotions can be. The outward projection, using you instead of I...its seems to allude to something. Very nice.