secrets

burry all your secrets
hide them away and
never remember them again
your life is spinning out of control
inside this suicidal world
i know theres an end
is it gonna save you?
is this what life is?

memories are dying all around you
nothing you do will make them stay
fading away with every breath
you keep on dying because you love to live

all i wanna know is why
you always push everyone away
why you always have to lie

somewhere inside
this suicidal world
you struggle to survive
all those around you
continue to break
look around
this lifes not easy

decieving all those around you
lies are your best friend
hiding who you really are
cold hearted and alone
with no one to turn to
all your secrets are coming alive
you can't run from what you are
no one can run that long

labeled a liar
called you out on everything
you never took responsibility
for everything you've done

memories are dying all around you
nothing you do will make them stay
fading away with every breath
you keep on dying because you love to live

all i wanna know is why
you always push everyone away
why your so quick to place the blame

you don't even see your the problem
not everyone else
it's all a choice you've made

your lies will be taken
to the grave
and in the end you'll find
that your all alone no one cares
or ever loved you

if you could take it all back
and start over from the beginning
you should start by loving yourself
no more lies just to fit in

it's time to say goodbye
to what you've become
take a moment to realize
that you don't have to live just to die

Reviews

[QuietPoet]

This was a very deep piece. You expressed yourself well in it. Hope all is well with you.

[JenLyn]

I agree with Melissa I love it and it reminds me of someone. Great write.

[MelissaFig]

I absolutly love this one! Reminds me of someone I know...

[Domo]

I agree with Sarah Marie, the best line is most definitely "you don't have to live just to die". It reflects the poem in a way, makes it certain. Good job.

[Hi]

I agree with the person that reviewed this poem before me, but not the intensity part because it, in my opinion, is already pretty good. You could do a bit more on details because poems have more emotion, feeling, and details. I think that every writer needs to writer with more detail, including me. Very well written, though.

[Legion]

I'm on the fence on this one. The story idea (message) is sound, but I think the writing could use some upgrading. More intensity I suppose. It (to me) doesn't really grab the reader by the throat and throttle them into consciousness. I hope that makes sense. If you rewrite it, let me know and I'll reread it.

[Sarah Marie]

very intense and raw emotions. i can feel every word. good work.

"you don't have to live just to die"
best line.

[deeps]

I like this write alot. I think this is a very well written write here.

[lindsay]

"all i wanna know is why
you always push everyone away
why you always have to lie"

I want to know why too. I want to know why so many people are like that. I like how you write.

[A]

This poem was intense! There seems to be a lot of hurt in this piece. I love how you say that the person, whoever that may be, should start by loving themselves and then try and make up with everyone else. Your poem has a great message in it. This piece was written very well. Great poem :)