result

my angry response to some thoughtless comment

Don't confuse 

My pursuit for nothingness with

Your pursuit for everything.

While our sense of fulfillment

At the end of these roads

May be similar,

They have arisen from two

Very different

Results.

Author's Note

this is really bad omg, i really just slapped this down on the page cause it was in my head. its kind of personal, and originated from a comment my friend made that i responded to badly. once again, constructive criticism is welcome, but i have no plans for this, its just a jumble of thought

Reviews

[emipoemi]

Sometimes great poetry arises from the most unlikely of places/situations. What you have here, is not bad at all - not all poetry needs to rhyme. This has a message, this has power, it dances and sings, and it's profound. Don't cut yourself short. The first stanza in particular rocks, and the last stanza is a killing finish. My only suggestion is to put the "with" in Stanza 1 down a line (so say instead "My pursuit for nothingness/With your pursuit for everything). It's not advisable to end a line with a "weak" word, as they're called. You always want to end strong, and hit it home. Well done!

[Richard McLin]

It's really short, I mean REALLY short, and that is something I really like about it. You can read that it's personal, there is something hidden in it, an argument the reader is not fully aware of, adds some mystery to the poem. I actually really enjoyed it.
-Richard

[McEltic]

Depending on the result of the pursuit of the person pursuing... we surmise there may or may not be a fulfilling, lasting relationship developing :)