Killing Time
A Poem by
Sabbath_Nikole
A midnight spin off.
Ashes to Ashes
Dust to Dust
On the inside
We're already begining to Rust
Tattoos amd polliwags
Lightning strikes to 9
Too late much
Too late
To stop the raining inside
Metal gears
And pruning shears
Clip away the limbs
That bind
Until all of us
Remember
Another time
Gunshine and push-up bra's
I think it may be
Killing time
But lightning only strikes to 9
You're too late
Much too late
For the shine inside
For this husk's tears
And metal gears
All tell the time
I'm rusting
Can't you hear the chime
Ashes to Ashes
Dust to Dust
All the bones
Begin to break
And it's too late
To fix broken gears
To unshed tears
To mend the parts I trust
Cuz we're all falling inside
With details unknown
And hearts unsown
We all turn to rust
And it's
Killing time.
© 2010 Sabbath_Nikole
Featured Review
time marches on and waits for no one,
the best we can do with our time is share it with those we love,
remember it in our stories of long ago,
and tell them to our children,for Quality Time spent with them,
they then will learn from our mistakes and mis-use of time,
so that while they might be killing time,it wasn't wasted time...
Posted 14 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Reviews
Another great poem I loved it. I think it's something all of us need to look at and understand about pointless waste of time.
Posted 13 Years Ago
Another great poem I loved it. I think it's something all of us need to look at and understand about pointless waste of time.
This was a good poem. I really like it a lot. I know how much I kill time by reading. Doing what I want to do. Thanks for sharing. :)
Posted 13 Years Ago
This was a good poem. I really like it a lot. I know how much I kill time by reading. Doing what I want to do. Thanks for sharing. :)
I took a long hard look at this person and wondered where the soul went.
You filled the lines with the feelings of loneliness. Watching the machine
dying inside the flesh creates an emotional tug of war between the mortal
and immortal themes involved. This poem was very clever in many ways.
Posted 13 Years Ago
I took a long hard look at this person and wondered where the soul went.
You filled the lines with the feelings of loneliness. Watching the machine
dying inside the flesh creates an emotional tug of war between the mortal
and immortal themes involved. This poem was very clever in many ways.
A nice killing poem. I enjoy it.
Posted 14 Years Ago
A nice killing poem. I enjoy it.
I like this, to me it could be lyrics to a song. Did you ever think of that?
Posted 14 Years Ago
I like this, to me it could be lyrics to a song. Did you ever think of that?
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Good write. Flows well for the most part, a little restructure will fix the hiccups. Time marches on but what will we become?
Posted 14 Years Ago
Good write. Flows well for the most part, a little restructure will fix the hiccups. Time marches on but what will we become?
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
time marches on and waits for no one,
the best we can do with our time is share it with those we love,
remember it in our stories of long ago,
and tell them to our children,for Quality Time spent with them,
they then will learn from our mistakes and mis-use of time,
so that while they might be killing time,it wasn't wasted time...
Posted 14 Years Ago
time marches on and waits for no one,
the best we can do with our time is share it with those we love,
remember it in our stories of long ago,
and tell them to our children,for Quality Time spent with them,
they then will learn from our mistakes and mis-use of time,
so that while they might be killing time,it wasn't wasted time...
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I like your neurotic style. Poem could be brushed up a bit, it flows but I believe with some tinkering you could have something great. Keep writing :p
Posted 14 Years Ago
I like your neurotic style. Poem could be brushed up a bit, it flows but I believe with some tinkering you could have something great. Keep writing :p
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
In the first stanza on the fourth line, I would drop the word already...
Other then that you have a great write..I enjoyed this very much...
Posted 14 Years Ago
In the first stanza on the fourth line, I would drop the word already...
Other then that you have a great write..I enjoyed this very much...
A masterpiece, in a form of it's rarest.
Posted 14 Years Ago
A masterpiece, in a form of it's rarest.
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Sabbath_Nikole Somewhere in, OH
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I am a thinker, in some ways Im considered an adult. I have a passion for some things that could rival the suns heat. Im not just another face in the crowd. Im a sister to two, and a cousin and godmot..
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