Killing Time

A midnight spin off.

Ashes to Ashes

Dust to Dust

On the inside

We're already begining to Rust

 

Tattoos amd polliwags

Lightning strikes to 9

Too late much

Too late

 

To stop the raining inside

Metal gears

And pruning shears

Clip away the limbs

That bind

Until all of us

Remember

Another time

 

Gunshine and push-up bra's

I think it may be

Killing time

 

But lightning only strikes to 9

You're too late

Much too late

 

For the shine inside

For this husk's tears

And metal gears

All tell the time

 

I'm rusting

Can't you hear the chime

 

Ashes to Ashes

Dust to Dust

All the bones

Begin to break

And it's too late

 

To fix broken gears

To unshed tears

To mend the parts I trust

Cuz we're all falling inside

With details unknown

And hearts unsown

 

We all turn to rust

And it's

Killing time.

Reviews

[LonelySoul]

time marches on and waits for no one,
the best we can do with our time is share it with those we love,
remember it in our stories of long ago,
and tell them to our children,for Quality Time spent with them,
they then will learn from our mistakes and mis-use of time,
so that while they might be killing time,it wasn't wasted time...

[SarahCortland]

Another great poem I loved it. I think it's something all of us need to look at and understand about pointless waste of time.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was a good poem. I really like it a lot. I know how much I kill time by reading. Doing what I want to do. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I took a long hard look at this person and wondered where the soul went.
You filled the lines with the feelings of loneliness. Watching the machine
dying inside the flesh creates an emotional tug of war between the mortal
and immortal themes involved. This poem was very clever in many ways.

[HorrorMaster]

A nice killing poem. I enjoy it.

[Marie Harrison]

I like this, to me it could be lyrics to a song. Did you ever think of that?

[Senseless whatever]

Good write. Flows well for the most part, a little restructure will fix the hiccups. Time marches on but what will we become?

[LostCauze[:P]]

I like your neurotic style. Poem could be brushed up a bit, it flows but I believe with some tinkering you could have something great. Keep writing :p

[Dream Weaver]

In the first stanza on the fourth line, I would drop the word already...
Other then that you have a great write..I enjoyed this very much...

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

A masterpiece, in a form of it's rarest.