A Fiery Spirit

Mythical girls #6

Mass of tangled knots

Snarled thoughts

Raven hair

So lovely fair

 

Cruel hands

Jagged structures

A ghostly wind

Blown away

 

A though of smoke

Drifts softly

To tell, you know

A wild things lives

 

Within my soul

Trying, thrashing, tearing apart

Any logic

In my mind

 

A raging darkness

A future so bleak

My songs

Are left

 

Everything pushed to one last

Resort

Combing through darkness

So drawn up

Confused

 

Tightened coils of fury

Deep within my bones

Shackles of torment

Burn my wrists and throat

 

Nails wracked across my skull

Pain searing throughout my mind

Too long, too short

Imperfect

 

I am everything in this world

That is wrong in your eyes

I am death, I am shadow

The smoke, smog, and dust

 

That clings to your throat

Defying your thirst

I am night, the moon

Pixie dust, enchantment, and illusion

 

Twist, shimmer, wild things

Freak, Goth, vampire, imp, faery

I shift

Constantly

I am different

Spontaneous and just a little bit crazy

 

Didn't think about that, now did you?

 

That too far off

For you to comprehend

 

Now lets see

How you do

Now that your world has been turned

Upside down

Author's Note

Original 2004

Reviews

[r]

This is, like, the most amazing poem I've ever written. All of your poems are wonderful, but...wow. I'm not sure what to say about it. It was saturated with emotion, fury and hurt and darkness. as if suffering and agony and anguish bled from her, seeped from her skin. Very well written, love the imagery, and i love how you did the lines.

[KatiePie]

This was... AMAZING. I mean, there is no way I could even put what I'm felling right now into the proper word, this poem, this piece of art is burning, dripping, bleeding with emotions, feelings, hurt and pain, and it's clothed in beauty, every word that comes together to create this is it's own, but for this, to express the way you were feeling they work in unison, perfectly, one with another and it's beautiful, I'm at a loss for words and I wish I could be more articulate with expressing what it is I'm feeling right now, but sadly I can't, this poem just took my breath away. Great write!
-Cathrine

[Antonio Valentino]

"I am everything in this world
That is wrong in your eyes
I am death, I am shadow
The smoke, smog, and dust
That clings to your throat
Defying your thirst

I am night, the moon
Pixie dust, enchantment, and illusion
Twist, shimmer, wild things
Freak, Goth, vampire, imp, faery

I shift
Constantly
I am different
Spontaneous and just a little bit crazy

Didn't think about that, now did you?

That too far off
For you to comprehend

Now lets see
How you do
Now that your world has been turned
Upside down"


This was amazing, I loved it!
Antonio xx

[ANGEL.X]

an amazing poem :)

[c.m.]

It's like each line just builds up more and more tension and the poem just gets better and better.

I am everything in this world
That is wrong in your eyes

That really caught me, made me read it over and over. Those are some wonderful lines with a huge impact. I like this...all in all, an amazing poem.

[HorrorMaster]

Very amazing poem

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem is a amazing. I had to read a few times. So many statements stood out.
"I am everything in this world
That is wrong in your eyes
I am death, I am shadow
The smoke, smog, and dust"
I like the direction you went with the poem. The poem got stronger with each line. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Poetic Beauty]

I love this write of it has a bit of mystery to it and for that it can be related into real life. the flow is easy to follow and the dark beauty of this poem is simply enthralling. this is wonderfully written and it reminds me of a paranormal story or a romance with the wrong person in real life.

[The Water Queen]

Strange wirtes are always the best. There was such great imagery and descriptions in this poem that the reader can feel the beauty in this darkness. I love the way you describe the creature in this poem. Great poem.

[Jong Schrijver]

wow................that was strange but it was amazing. Great poem