Willow

Mythical girl #4

Her voice cracks, her bones creak

In her mind she flies

Silently away

 

Away from all the pain

Her lips cold and blue

Her hair blown about wildly

 

But she stands alone

Planted her roots, her beliefs

Firmly into the ground

 

For only the ground

Can withstand her anger

Her bone shaking emotions

 

Running wild, frantic

In the storm

So tired is she, her eyes droop, her shoulders fall

 

Can her weather beat skin

Take it all?

The answer, it fails her

 

But yet goes on

Into the skies of time

Ancient and old, her song yet unsung

 

Til her voice cracks and her bones creak

Til her song is sung, and her mind let free

When the day comes

 

That she can run and dance

About the land

For the rest of her days

 

 

Reviews

[Ashley Black]

very good write. good show of emotions
"Can her weather beat skin

Take it all?

The answer, it fails her"
these lines are slightly confusing though like i get what you mean it was just something i had to reread it iinterrupted the flow but other than that it was really good

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

There is an incredible strength in these words. The sense of self and reluctance to surrender one's integrity is an inspiration. You have certainly captured how hard the pressure of the world can bear down on us.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this story. I like the battle to find safety and the positive ending to the poem. It was written with great skill that held me attention to the last word. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[LonelySoul]

Can her weather beat skin
Take it all?
The answer, it fails her
But yet goes on
Into the skies of time
Ancient and old, her song yet unsung

Haunting,yet Mysterious and Romantic...nice job

[chaotic katie]

i loved this the imagry was fantastic great job

[Sam Severn]

You combine both old-timey n' a twisted modern voice into something original n' new! This reads like scenes from a movie, like there's a gargantuan story n' a whole world buried beneath this poem....TOO FREAKIN' MUCH!! ㋡