Willow

Mythical girl #4

Her voice cracks, her bones creak

In her mind she flies

Silently away

 

Away from all the pain

Her lips cold and blue

Her hair blown about wildly

 

But she stands alone

Planted her roots, her beliefs

Firmly into the ground

 

For only the ground

Can withstand her anger

Her bone shaking emotions

 

Running wild, frantic

In the storm

So tired is she, her eyes droop, her shoulders fall

 

Can her weather beat skin

Take it all?

The answer, it fails her

 

But yet goes on

Into the skies of time

Ancient and old, her song yet unsung

 

Til her voice cracks and her bones creak

Til her song is sung, and her mind let free

When the day comes

 

That she can run and dance

About the land

For the rest of her days

 

 

Reviews

[Ashley Black]

very good write. good show of emotions
"Can her weather beat skin

Take it all?

The answer, it fails her"
these lines are slightly confusing though like i get what you mean it was just something i had to reread it iinterrupted the flow but other than that it was really good

[Poetic Beauty]

this is a very new way to write this tale. The imagery takes me on a journey with this old woman as she waits till it is her time to fly away to a better place. This is splendidly written and the flow is nicely done.

[Marie Harrison]

Cool and scary poem.

[HorrorMaster]

very good write my dear

[R E Tree]

There is lots of imagery in this it made me enjoy the poem more. I think the title suits the poem very well and you show the womans emotions clear and understanding to the reader. I feel like I was taken on a journey with you to see land, skies and to dance with a woman that has something interesting about her. The way you describe her is so imaginative

[Kat Plunkett]

i dont really know how but this reminded me of the corpse bride.
and it describes how i used to feel.. Kind've in a odd way at the least...
But its a really good poem.
love it(:

[ForTheWorld]

beautifully written...it was fabulous

[Senseless whatever]

Very good write. Full of emotion. Almost reads like an adventure for the soul.

[Ruth]

An old tale like feel to this :)
I like poetry such as that :) Beautifully done hon, really delicately woven to creates a sadness and yet hope!
xx

[Mary Katherine]

I love it when a poem tells a story. This was wonderful, evoking a time, a place, a feeling. Also, you can never go wrong with an Amy Brown fairy picture!