Fear

Feelin' pretty dark
Feeling utterly alone
Felt like I've lived through this all before

What is there for trying
Aren't we all getting a little tired of this dying
Don't fear this death is real
It's most unnatural
Fear the reality of this life
The death of one's true self
Fear the never finding of that self
Fear that lack of recognition
Once you stumble upon your pure self

Most fear goes into hiding
Most of us
Loathe the thought of dying
Most of us, are simply sick of trying
Exhausted of all the false pretense
Unable to sift through the lies and the Truth any longer
Unable to distinguish one from the other

We've lost so much
and yet most
have never even found
What mattered to begin with

Most of us fear of dying
But I think they truely fear
The sense of trying
And failng

Author's Note

This one was a little rocky.

Reviews

[Silvario]

idk about rocky. i was ably to find a rythm with it once i got the pacing right.

you display a very clear messege in this piece, one thats rather common. but one you manage to convey in such a way - with a creative rythm and repetitive use of words - that i found myself realy enjoying the read.

i didnt find the repetition distracting at all, but then im a fan of the technique.

all in all well done in my book :)

[Anne Martin]

I have some problems with this one. I find it a little too repetitive. Certain words (fear, dying, self, unable, most, feel/felt) happen too much without any real form or resolution. There is almost (but not quite) a pattern for a couple of them, but if you are going to repeat to that extent, you need to resolve it somehow, perhaps by having a stanza that featured only those words. Just a suggestion.

As far a content is concerned, I would have liked a little more focus. I think we all fear dying, but I think I would have liked a bit more about brought you to the point of writing this. Why caused you to have to put it into words at this moment? The death of a friend a pet, just a low mood. I'd like to see you dig a little deeper into the MO of this.

[Emily_]

Good concept but it felt a little rough to read through.