You Loved Me

Typical highschooler poetry away!

You loved me.
You loved my hormonal tendancies
and the way I smiled.

You left a rend across my heart
as you tore through my life,
a gap I cannot bridge
(who can bridge oblivion?),
or perhaps a gap
I do not want to bridge.
It has become my black hole
dragging me down
with midnight hands,
suffocating and terrifying.

I loved you.
I loved your naivete
and the way you talked to me.

What we had has shaped us,
changed us forever.
I still bear your mark
(and yet, a mark I cannot bear).
I will not pretend
that I am not still in love.
I will try to forget,
but for now,
I still can't pry away my fingers
from the memory of you.

Reviews

[Ruby]

I think I'd like it a lot more without the line "(who can bridge oblivion?)" - I feel oblivion was too dramatic too soon, where the black hole and midnight hands is far more effective. I didn't understand 'naiivette,' did you mean 'naivete' which Google tells me is the french spelling of naivety. But those things aside I love this. It feels quiet and I like the questioning tone you adopt in the lines "(and yet, a mark I cannot bear)" and "or perhaps a gap / I do not want to bridge."
It's very heartfelt and well written. Thanks for sharing it.

[PerfectFlaw90]

This is so sad! But the way you can take your feelings and put them into words that paint such a vivid picture is just awesome. The last two lines are just brilliant. Awesome work.