Mountain

Kinda short.

You.
I want to climb
to the tallest mountain
and let your poisonous name
echo off of the stone walls
until I go deaf
from it's terrible sound.

Author's Note

Tear this one apart. I like the idea and some of the metaphors, but I feel like it's lacking something.

Reviews

[PerfectFlaw90]

Hmmm. I guess for me, it's just a little short, and kinda hard for me to understand. In order to really understand metaphors, I have to have something to build on, some details. Of course that's just me. But I really do enjoy the flow and just the sounds of the words themselves are very artistic. I think if you just elaborate a bit more, this poem is golden.