Standstill

Just found it.. Don't even remember writing it :p

There’s nothing more to see,

Nothing more to do.

My life’s at a standstill and I don’t know what to make of it.

Days and weeks pass by, yet all I can do is sit in this chair, and wonder.

I can see everyone moving on all around me, yet all I can do is stand still.

Somewhere in my subconscious, I know what to do;

There just seems to be no way of transferring information from my mind to my body.

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

Perfect glimpse of the heart and mind frozen in time... wondering what will come... what's next... how to take the next step... Very vivid in your expression and relatable as well... Sometimes it's the only place one can be... waiting for the winds to fill the sails...

[Kaitlin]

AMAZING!! i love this so much. :)

[Adelia Alighieri]

I agree with Mr Froman. =)

[Abhinav]

oh this is so good,so small but amazingly written.

[nostal]

I know how you feel.
Very good job at conveying the feeling plainly and simply.
Nice.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I dont understand how a "Standstill" can have so much energy.
Everything in this poem speaks about being inactive, but there
is a spirit of unrest in it as well. I think your strength as a writer
comes from writing such in such Symmetry. You have a talent for
creating a Yin/Yang vibe. There is a balance to it...which Is quite
surprising when I consider the how the lines vary in length.

Very Clever.

Although I love the structure..The thoughts were brilliant as well.

[Coyote Poetry]

It is better to standstill and think sometimes. Gives us time to re-set the moment and allow us to think. I like this poem. You told a good story. I like the open ending.
Coyote