Twilight

A tale of a lonely soul

Twilight

On a delicate grass hill I lay, gazing at the twilight

I wonder if Ill ever know, what love is like first site.

I see young couples holding hands, im sure it’s a delight.

But I know, that I will never, have one to hold at night.

Yet still I hope, a day will come  where I will meet the one

Who will be with me the end of day, and the greetings of the sun

When we meet, I’ll truly know my life has just begun

And when we part, my life comes close to none

But still I know, deep inside, that love is not for me

Although its dark, although its bleak, it’s my reality

Love is not for all, and that I now see

The sun is now set, my soul is set free

Author's Note

Any constructive criticism would be appreciated! thanks for reading!!

Reviews

[Jay Jay]

"love is not for all"

[Meredith Leigh]

'Love is not for all, and that I now see

The sun is now set, my soul is set free'

I thought it was really cool. Keep working on the formats, but I thought it was great, and enjoyable to read.

- Kriss

[R Merritt]

Jeez man its dark. its sad too. do you mean it?

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PRETTY COOL DUDE

[Luna Tique Fringe]

Lovely piece, tender and sad without being maudlin.

A few neglected apostrophes, here and there and a little
awkward in parts..but definitely a nice poem. Just my preference, but I would like to see this left alighned..more modern. Oh, and periods at the end of every complete thought..or at none of them..just be consistent.

[Changed to a New Accoun..]

this was really well written, amazing job. ^.^

[BLACKCRUSH]

I think your poem is beautiful the way it is ....I wouldn't change it.