Introspection of poor writing

Paragraphs fell out of my brain, splatting on the paper like rotten tomatoes.  The smell was hard to write out and took several drafts to hide; but even so it lingered, however so faintly, a mongrel dog begging not to be forgotten in the cold.  His only company the flees that hop from one sentence to the next.

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[K. Louis]

'a mongrel dog begging not to be forgotten' -- I liked the images in this

[Robert Wlaschin]

Thanks. I don't know how I came up with that line. I was reading "Reading like a Writer" by Francine Prose and I was inspired to write an interesting paragraph. This was one of the outcomes of that.