Even the sun seems lethargic A runny red yoke, reluctant to rise Its tired rays bathe the street in sepia and melancholy
Your lush green lawn of May is now a patchwork of dead spots and desiccated wisps like whiskers on an ancient holy man
A scattering of scorched brown leaves -- the ones that weren’t strong enough to make it until October -- lie in the backyard like a school of beached starfish
In town, the streets are empty public places without any public as if part of a government experiment to vaporize all signs of life except the white noise of the cicadas
Maybe everyone has gone to the beach to swim and sleep To forget the end of summer.
Your metaphors bring this to life. When I read your writing I find myself thing "oh yeah" I see what he is describing like I knew it all along but couldn't formulate the right description.
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11 Years Ago
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