A girl I know

A girl I know showed me the sky

Then she showed me the sea

A girl I know showed me the door

And now there’s only me

 

A girl I know gave me the world

Then she took it away

A girl I know fed me a meal

And said I couldn’t stay

 

A girl I know pushed me farther

Than I ever had been

A girl I know offered her hand

And said I was her friend

 

A girl I know kissed me twice

She said once wasn’t enough

A girl I know said to be quiet

Not to talk of this stuff

 

A girl I know hid herself away

When I needed her most

A girl I know came back around

And held me oh so close

 

A girl I know dropped her tears

As she turned to leave

A girl I know spun on her heel

In silence watched her leave

 

A girl I know say come here now

Then she pushed me away

A girl I know carries my heart

Wherever she is today

 

A girl I know knows me better

Than I know myself

A girl I know laughs and she smiles

And puts my love on the shelf

 

A girl I know causes panic

If the phone rings or when it don’t

A girl I know would recognize herself

Inside this silly note

 

A girl I know could still the wind

With a simple flash of her eyes

A girl I know stays far away

And part of me dies

 

A girl I know took refuge in me

Until she felt quite well

She’s left me now

I sit alone

There’s nothing more to tell

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Emilie Barn]

Woah! I can see that it comes from your true feelings... I like the flow of words. It's a really nice poem. Really good job. Keep it up =))

[Emerald Seas]

The rhythm is off a little here and there, and with a little tweaking I think would be a smoother read. Wonderful take on the complicated world of lost love.

You write from a man's perspective toward a woman, yet I know a man (or two) where this story line would fit for their "exit"! Just sayin'... :)

[Lumière Dé..]

This is lovely. Some grammar is a bit off and 'leave' does not in fact rhyme with 'leave' unless you decided to take a Pitbull aproach to it... Otherwise fair good :)

[Lily Mae]

It's hard to say why timing is off..with men and women.. You have shown the beauty and pain of it.. I agree bittersweet but a great write..x

[olla]

I enjoyed this.. even though it is bittersweet..

[bob, small b. aka invs]

women are so complicated. men are so simple. it's a wonder we ever connect at all. i guess we just have to be grateful for what we have, when we have it.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

I enjoyed this very much, Thank you for the good write. I don’t find this poem sad for one reason. They are simply vessels making room for the soul mate to come. There is not right or wrong in love, there are simply two people crossing paths in search for the right one. Our minds want it so much it hides what it already knew. Ahhhh the masterful game of love. thank for the good write.

[allie_arrowz]

awww :(
I'm sorry buddy.
this is really beautiful, thanks for sharing

[Cathy Wattam]

Wonderful write. It's a heartache, nothin' but a heartache........

Keep writing!

[P.S.Chance]

this makes me sad, perhaps I identify. convinced that love endures, though - maybe not from those we most desire it.