OLY

Author's Note

OLY

Olympia is waking up.
I can see it in their eyes.
I can see it in the way they walk,
Yawning at the sky.
Above the Urban Onion,
An elderly man in pajamas
Dances with his cat.
And, after buttered wheat toast and jam
He puts on his favorite hat.
A few floors up the Oly PD
Studies the subcultures of Sylvester Park.
Face seeks respite from an abscess tooth in the gazebo.
“The pain, the pain”, he says,
“…must be baptized like a spark.”
Leilani sees her first morning at her new pad.

(08.15.96)
Russell Munroe

Reviews

[unsavable_soul]

Interesting,
I was read requested here by a friend. I will be honest and up front, that is my style. I find this had interesting ideas and great mental imagery. I will also say that it makes no sense to me. At first I felt like I was following you and then about here you lost me...
"Above the Urban Onion,"
I am not rating or really critique this as it is either above me or really is hard to grasp. I would like to ask what this is about and maybe I could get some understanding that way.
Sincerely
Christopher
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[Russell Munroe]

thanks for reading...

It really is nothing more than a snapshot of a morning in and around Sylvester Park in Olympia, Washington (US). A picture has been uploaded to accompany this poem. It shows the gazebo mentioned therein. The Urban Onion is a restaurant in a building across the street from the park. The brick building has been has assorted retail on the bottom floor and apartments above. I hope this helps...and I look forward to your insights.

Be Well'

Russ

[Russell Munroe]

ooops...the following, "The brick building has been has assorted retail on the bottom floor and apartments above.", should have read: "The brick building has assorted retail on the bottom floor and apartments above."

[Russell Munroe]

Leilani's apartment was in that building.

[unsavable_soul]

I shall check out the picture.
I think this is a bit more interesting given the context. You should consider putting description and note on your work so we are aware as we read, just a thought. Given the contexts It's not bad at all, I also didn't catch the drift on Oly, now i get it. I also looked it up. Sorry about being slow on the up take.
Sincerely
Christopher